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WARNING! Carry on reading! Or you will die, even if you only looked at the word warning! Once there was a little girl called Clarissa, she was ten-years-old and she lives in a mental hospital, because she killed her mom and dad. She got so bad she went to kill all the staff in the hospital so the More-government decided that the best idea was to get rid of her so they set up a special room to kill her, as humane as possible but it went wrong the machine they were using went wrong. And she sat there in agony for hours until she died. Now every week on the day of her death she returns to the person that read this letter, on a Monday night at 12:00 a.m. She creeps into your room and kills you slowly, by cutting you and watching you bleed to death. Now send this to ten other pictures on the site, and she will haunt someone else who doesn't. This isn't fake, apparently, if you copy and paste this to ten comments in the next ten minutes you will have the best day of your life tomorrow. .

I really don't now what to say. I came here for a Naruto is a Medic fic and ended up with an asshole who is an absolute disgrace for his profession.
He has to learn about female anatomy...by groping and peeping at girls in the hot spring?! (what about books? or models...) Tsunade in the Manga/ Anime made it perfectly clear that she doesn't approve of Jiraya's habits and without doubt she would correct this type of behaviour. Since she adopted him and gave him the family he so desperatly wanted (judging from his thoughts about shinobi in this fic even more than in canon) it doesn't make sense for him to act against her teachings like that.
Hell, fanfic Tsunade obiously not caring about him being a pervert is one thing, but him using his status as medic to justify invading other people's (in this case especially women's) privacy is appaling. And Ino thinks being kissed against ones will as well as being touched by a stranger without ones consent is how a men should behave?! Touching someone without their consent isn't chivalry. It isn't romantic. It is sexual harassment and that is not something you should try to justify.

And don't let me get started on his treatment of Hinata. Starting chapter one your Fanfic Naruto has been spouting about the Medic rules acting like he takes pride in his profession and takes his "job" seriously.
A doctor who has the means to help a patient and refuses because they don't approve of the others profession has no right to call himself/herself a doctor. He is a petty asshole with a grudge and some medical knowledge. Someone like that shouldn't be allowed near a patient.
Not to mention Hinata hasn't even done anything to him. If you don't want to treat shinobi then you shoudn't work at a hospital in a shinobi village! Open a doctor's office for civilians, problem solved!

This may be a fictional story, but as Naruto fan and a medical student I feel very upset at this potrayal of medical personnel and the very characters that in series are proud and professional medic nin.
Also the way you write about it in your story, I'm not sure if you realize this but either groping or peeping are very offensive moves towards either gender if you don't have the other persons consent. Not respecting another persons wishes concerning their privacy is a crime in many counties and something you can be arrested for. Writing about it like it is okay or even something positive really ticks me of...

Welp this story went straight in the trash

"When you find a way to control a teenage boy, tell me. I will gladly take any advice."
True, Tsunade...too true. I've tried. I'm convinced it's payback for things I did and didn't do. -_-'

the fuck was that scene with kiba and tayuya

And why did Naruto even say that sht to the genin, just looking for an altercation at that point

Ffs, i cant stand that random kiss sht, its sexual assault and so rapey. Idk how its become so normalized in fanfiction, imagine that sht happening irl

Seriously! Why? It was going so well and you just had to kind of start something completely new! Maybe you should read through the start of the book and allude to the dad and sister instead, cause this is just stupid really!

"No ordinary person could have dodged all those attacks so easily. Just who are you"
I find this just a bit unbelievable because of "ninja/shinobi trying to kill civilians and saying this wtf?!
otherwise it was fine

interesting story

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Fuck sake i really hate this Arataro plot line

This Arataro seems like such a fucking dickhead, idk why you introduced him

Wow, this has to ve the first time OCs have completely ruined a fanfic for me. Is ten chapters in really the best time to reveal crucial characters. Also ones that are so unlikable? Parts tgat are supposed to be funny come across as annoying, parts that are supposed to be heartfelt come across as annoying, basically everything with them comes across as annoying. Genuinely incredible

This fix was good but you kind of ruined it with the OC's. I mean TSUNADE HAVING A HUSBAND , YEAH PISS OFF

This story seems to be slowing down info mumbo jumbo fluffy nothing's. Will Naruto's life always be based on a lie? Will the truth about Kakashi trying to kill Naruto when he was like 3 years old and in the process destroyed the Kyubi seal every come out? Will anyone ever realize who Naruto's real father is? How is someone who is not dark skinned supposed to be killer bee and the Raikages brother?