Good story

This was a good story. Great job!

I'm happy to read that Harry still has his magic!

*I just realized I misread. This is a finished story. AND I was not done writing my review.

This was an interesting start. I have to agree with other reviewers that it's a bit wordy at times. (But, I thought it was pretty cool because it's like Harry's thoughts without it being first person...)

I am going to be reading the next chapter, but I did not like how I accidentally ended my logged in review.

It's like a deus ex machina in the first chapter...?

Actually looked up to see if that was at all possible or if there was another word for something like that in the beginning; the the closest one was geared more toward science fiction, unobtainium. There was also this other, MacGuffin, but I don't know how relevant that intervention is going to be for the rest of the story.

I'm kinda scared to continue reading. I'm just unsure if it's because it's unfinished for many years, or if I'm going to not like it.

Oh, get over yourself. You like leaving on a cliffie and you know it.

I was actually hoping that Harry won't be attracted immediately by Edward. I mean, well expectation vs reality I supposed.
Anyway, another point also is that I thought Edward can only hear the thought that people currently are thinking about, not the memories. Sounds weird when I read that end part.
Also, I also thought that Harry's perception of Edward would be first 'The Cedric of another dimension ' haha.
Another point is, I thought that the Cullen family already heard Harry talking with Dr Cullen and Edward . cause of strong sense of hearing (super hearing ha!)
This is my review ATM. So far though, it still is a good read so I'll continue reading the succeeding chapters.

SWEET!

I realize this was written years ago, but I just wanted to compliment you on how much your writing and sentence structure improved throughout the story. Grammar didn't seem to be an issue for you, but in the the beginning you had a tendency to over explain everything to the point of redundancy. I had a migraine before I started reading last night, and it nearly killed me to keep reading the circular explanations, but I kept reading because I liked your idea. I'm glad I did, because it was a very interesting story, and I liked seeing your literary progress.

This is interesting, seems like it will be good!

Incredible story! Well done! Well done indeed.

Thanks !

***Pyrane***

Very interesting so far! Only thing I noticed is that you kept writing Emmet when it's spelt Emmett.

*thank you very much for this story, i read your story by Harpys (because i'm french), but i would like to know your chapter 7 and 8. It's a beautiful story thank !

Love it.