That was a wonderful story! I would often forget that I was reading a fanfiction and believe that it was a continued story in the Narnian world I love so much! You did a brilliant job staying to true to all the characters, and keeping C. S. Lewis' poignant message. I loved every minute of it! Keep writing!

Wow. I'm, frankly, overwhelmed with emotion at the moment. That story was exciting and moving... and then you had to go and add that verse. It fit perfectly (and it's one of my favorites), so now I'm an emotional wreck. So good job ;)
In all seriousness, though, i loved this story.
Normally, i would have reviewed more chapters, but here i was just too excited to read the next one.
You portrayed the bond between all four siblings, but especially Peter and Susan, perfectly. Your writing style was also very effective. Normally i hate first person, but it really worked here- it made me feel like i was there, experiencing what they experienced, feeling what they felt. So good job with that!
In terms of the plot, at first it was rather basic. The siblings, either all or some, are on their own, injured, and have to get back to Narnia. But you continually surprised me with twists, new characters, and things i didn't expect but loved even more because of that.
Most importantly, i loved all the great Aslan moments. Often, when a story like this is written, the author will make it seem like the siblings do everything on their own. You, however, made sure to point out that Peter and Susan would not have survived without the grace of Aslan. I really appreciated seeing that :)
I know that you're a Christian, and i am too, so i liked how you inserted the subtle religious references. C.S. Lewis had them too, so you stayed true to that without overwhelming the reader- something that is very hard to do.
Really the only thing i would change would be to add some line break when time passes. Sometimes i got confused when time passed, so maybe just add an extra space or a line of dashes or something to make those more clear.

That's it from me! Sorry bout the long review, i got a little carried away... as you can tell, i loved this! Keep writing Narnia.

Peter is the rotten egg...
love it

That verse at the end is my favorite verse in the Bible! I have been very impressed by your story. Well done!

This story is great. You did a marvelous job.

I loved this story. I read it in under 48 hours. I loved the entire thing although I did get nervous about Peter a couple of times. If you would like I will review each chapter individually. I added it to my community even.

Lion Be With You,
Ashleigh

I realize that I'm a few years too late. But every once in awhile you find a story that just happens to be what you need at that exact moment. You my aquaintance are an amazing writer, and if I can get past the tears, I'll read more! God Bless!

Michelle

Yay! A Marshwiggle! Their pessimism is so humourous!

Oh my goodness that was a lovely story. I loved every chapter. Thanks for putting this up. I wish I could write so beautifully.

An absolutely wonderful story. What Peter said at the end is absolutely true - any true courage is not due to anything inherent in ourselves, but is the result of what the Lord instills in us.

This story is now one of my favourites.

I absolutely loved this book! I love the way you write the Pevensies. I especially like that this book is about Susan and Peter. I think it was really sweet that he was helping her even though it was hurting him. I really liked the end with the scripture. I really hope that you will do another golden age fic that features Susan and Peter. Over all a really great job with this book!

NarnianPrincess1992

"Have a great week"? I could kiss you! What a great sense of humor.

AWESOME!

And Being a brick means you are strong and reliable

This story was fantastic. I have to say I would have liked to see more of the sprites, the rest of the story was just fanominal(yes my spelling is atrocious, I have accepted that). This story was enthralling to the end and I thank you for taking us on this journey. I eagerly, if not patiently await your next work of art.

AH! This was so stinkin' awesome! My GOODNESS! O.O

I LOVED the last paragraphs Peter says! They're so loving and beautiful! *U* The Pevensie relationship are always so AMAZING! (Plus, Peter's horrible cooking doesn't make me feel so bad, seeing as I don't have much experience in kitchen myself... XD)

Gosh...Werewolf poison. Joy... *shudders* That did NOT sound like fun. O.o

Rock on! I'm going to check out your DeviantArt thing, as well as keep an eye out for more of your stories! U *U*

Ever-so sincerely signed,

Shizuku Tsukishima749 :D ;D :) ;)