I think the Deux Ex Machima was pretty clumsily done to save Ran. If we had seen the evil guy's chara before, it wouldn't have been as bad.

Finally! Mikyu has realized that freedom is power all on its own. Too bad she still wants kick-ass power too.

You couldn't just kill Mai, could you. No, you had to turn her into a soulless zombie! Why do all your stories make me want to cry, but this was the worst of all! Waaaaah!

Why can't Miyuki understand that the Darkness keeps her from enjoying the power it gives her?

Right after Myuki finished Mai's story, I stopped reading. I thought, "I know what will make the story happy. However, I also know Arrowfoot."

I was afraid to continue reading because I didn't want to know Myuki's decision. And so I saw your desent into killing off major characters.

Happy belated birthday! You're either 21, 22, or 23 now, right? Now I know another thing about you! Mwahahaha! Sorry, did I pick up some traits of Azami? Now to make us even. My birthday is 11/15/?

I like how you mix humor and depression in this story.

Arrowfoot, I hate you. It's 2 in the morning, and your fanfiction won't let me get to sleep so I can go to school in the morning at 7.

*Assumes fatherly tone*

"Oh look, my favorite fanfic writer is growing up. I feel so proud!" *Wipes tear from eye*

It's interesting to watch you grow up through the author's notes.

You've misspelled a couple of words in this chap. Anyway, I feel kawii after reading this. And no, this is not Amu-ish

Thought I'd read a non-Pokémon fanfic of yours. Lawful Good characters are so overrated. Chaotic Good or Neutral antiheros are better. This character so sounds like me in an evil mood, which is about 65% of the time.

You're story is, by far, the most amazing (and I'm pretty sure the longest) fanfic I've ever read. Other than a few misspellings here and there (which looked to me like simple typos) you did beautifully. I think your writing style is very nice, and also, I remember you writing on a note you thought it might be too detailed? I don't mind, the details are well done. I have just finished book 1, and after this comment I can't wait to read book 2!

Oh, by the way, I so agree about loving to see Yoru's reactions when he gets something cat-related! XD

Who's your favorite Guardian Character in the anime/manga? Mine's Yoru~nya :3

This is amazing.

Alrighty then, the first time I can get on a computer, and I have six chapters done so far. I like this... It has more of a realistic feel to it. Power. It's a good ambition to have. That's the thing, her dream is more of an ambition at this point, correct? Well, anyways, I liked that. I haven't read many that are focused on one obtaining as much power as they can.

If this gets even better, I'll have this done in no time. You have another reader in me!

Gah, this is the third time I've tried writing this review! The first time my phone shut off when I was almost done, and the second time I accidentally deleted everything!

Anyway, just as a forewarning, I may not review much because I don't like pointing out something someone's already said and this story is complete, but I did want to let you know that I'm really enjoying it so far! I guess it's what I've been semi-consciously looking for for a while now. It's so refreshingly different, with no guaranteed happy ending for everyone and a main character who isn't a complete goody-goody.

I absolutely love the way you portray Ikuto. He's completely in character, in my opinion, as well as every other character from the anime. And Azami and Yoru's little friend rivalry is so cute! I also admire how you didn't give Miyuki (love the name btw!) some unearthly power to be completely unfazed by him, apart from her Chara-change, as sometimes happens with OC's. She acts pretty much how anyone else would, somewhat dazed by him - he is Ikuto, after all, lol. I'm looking forward to more light shed on his and Amu's relationship, if indeed there is any in this book (as I'm pretty sure there will be).

As for when Yoru and Azami woke Miyuki up, I think it might be better for you to put it in third person. It's a really cute little scene, but Miyuki wouldn't have known any of that happened. I've found that what really gets me into a story is when, in first person, they only write exactly what the main character experiences. If they were mistaken about something, they would most likely not notice they were and continue to think they were right until something happened to prove them wrong, in which case the exclusive first-person would make it all the more shocking to the reader (just as an example). When only exactly what they were experiencing at the time is written, it draws people in, giving them very similar emotions to the character. But you probably know that already, right? I don't mean to be preaching or anything, and I'm sorry if I'm just stating the obvious it not making any sense at all. I'm just offering my advice. :) Anyway, to keep that adorable scene, you may want to just switch it to third person for a bit instead of making it seem like Miyuki is recalling something she didn't know about at the time but was told about in detail later.

Once again, it's wonderful so far, and I'm really looking forward to reading the rest and then book 2! :)

i have really been lazy with reading this. i finally finished the first book, and now i'll go read the second.

i'm actually beginning to like this better than the anime. i'm really curious to see what you have planned for the second book, so i think i'm going to go read that now...bye!

I find the conversation and thoughts too sophisticated for fifth graders. More like 8th grade or low high school, especially with the whole gothic expelled vibe. In fifth grade, parents are likely to tickle out emo depression and social withdrawal; it's only when high school comes rolling by that space is given. Fifth grade is a bad setting for how you've drawn the main character, as you'd need more backgrounding for it to work for me. Main character adopted, or suffered some big trauma, or something to explain her delinquency and cynicism as young as fifth grade.