SO CUTE OMG THEY ARE THE BEST SHIP IN THE SERIES I WONT BE TOLD OTHERWISE!

you are a get story teller. And if all writer were good at grammer there would be no use for editers.

1st of all its: "I will bite you to death 'like cornered rats'" you left a few words out.

second of all, its nt THAT OOC. in fact, i think it fits their personality a bit. but work on ur innocent uke, yep. jst him. ur seme was fine.

it fits perfectly.

if u want ooc look at mine!

wonderful it up~!

Nicely done! Despite what you said about bad sentence structure, I thought you wrote everything out quite well! - It was very cute and believable! Mou! Please keep up the good work! I look foward to seing more of you in the fandom! *cheeky grin* Happy New Years Eve! Ja NE!

Yours Truly,

C.A.W! The one and ONLY! _~