Don’t be too hard on the writer, I honestly thought this was a good one shot

HORRORENDOUS

I make up stories in my mind, and when I read that I actually used it

This makes me want to commit suicide.

Where is the punctuation? Where is the grammar? Do you even own a dictionary?

Sheesh, how old are you, and do you go to school?

God, writers like you are polluting the Artemis Fowl archive.

Do I need to say more?

Have you ever heard of a dictionary? It's one of those big books, you know the things, lots of words in them, they can help you with spelling. Seriously. 'Oficers'? 'Maid of honer'?

Slightly scathingly,

THE LLAMA WITHOUT AN ACCOUNT

I'm just going to rank you out of ten for some things to avoid awkardness:

Characterisation (meaning in-character-ness): 3/10

Spelling and grammer: 7/10

Writing style: 2/10

Over all: 4/10

Not as bad as some, but not exactly brilliant.

That was amazing.

Seems a little weird for J and V to be getting married seeing as J commander, V also commander council woman, but that's okay.

Your spacing is a little strange, and when I saw the part after "end flashback" all scrunched up like that, I was tempted to hit the back button. That kind of stuff hurts my eyes (and I don't think I'm the only one.) That's why everyone else's stories are double spaced.

Thankfully, I did decide to read it, because I was intrigued by the first three lines. JV is one of my all time favorite pairings, and I was stupid enough to forget to put it was an option of my poll. Gr.

NEWAYs, awesome story (minus my previous complaints.)

Your story has been...FAVED!

You MUST update again soon! I love it!

Aww! That's so CUTE! I'm a major supporter of J/V ships! Good job! Please update!

~Eva