i noticed that its not tag as complete are you still going to con't this or its just a one shot fic. anyway its nice,sad but nice

bittersweet... i almost cried. ahaha.

this is an awesome story.

Kumusta! I liked your fic, even if it did make me a little sad. NO! Natsuki! I have some suggestions to make your writing better: watch your grammar, punctuations, and spellings. English is a difficult language, so I know that this can be difficult. Mad props for you for writing in english, by the way. Instead of writing your dialogue as it would appear in a script (Natsuki:Mayo!), try writing it similar to this manner (Natsuki said, "Mayo!"); your writing will look more mature, and you'll gain more credibility as a writer. And instead of putting your character's actions in parentheses (frowns), write the character performing the action (Shizuru frowned.-or-Shizuru frowns-or I frowned). Please continue! I'd like to see how you continue the fic.

What the hell happened to the capital letters, full stops and spelling?