to the person two reviews above me:

imo the 2nd person pov is necessary... without it, this fanfic wouldn't be what it is. it's a story based solely on observation. the narrator (sachiko) is barely in the story (plot-wise), but she's still the narrator - which means that the author needs to find a way to make sure sachiko doesn't blend into the background. here's another reason 2nd pov is a good choice: sachiko (in the manga/anime) is pretty one-dimensional, so the author needs readers to identify with her to help her actually feel like a person to the audience.

sure, the flaws you mentioned are flaws the author made in writing believable characters, but these flaws don't correlate to a flaw in the writing itself (personally I think the person who wrote this is skilled at writing, though somewhat long-winded).

so yeah. wow, this comment was longer than I expected. the story's interesting though. idk, I might be wrong about all this. but why did I even write all of this out I'm already thinking of counterarguments to what I just wrote? fuck. this is literally a shitpost sorry author I love your writing

This piece of art struck a cord in me. I love this fanfiction so much. You must be a talented writer.

By the end of this year, this story will be a decade old. Now that makes me feel older. I was just a high school anime dweeb when this story came out lol. I was never in it for the pairing but I always felt there was untapped potential with Light's mom and sister as characters. So now, 9 years later, maybe I'll leave my review.

I think you've really let us get into the character of Sachiko. She's very protective, almost paranoid in this story. It sometimes feels like a little much, to be honest. Like how she seems just as paranoid after 4, 5 years later? When Light and Sayu haven't even seen each other for years? Dropping tea trays because Light smiled the wrong way? Now she's up at night, biting holes in her lips, from vivid nightmares? Like, chill lady. She's highly unstable, in a way that doesn't feel quite genuine.

The second person point of view is interesting, but I don't know what it really adds. I think the idea was to better make us relate to Sachiko and identify with her. To feel like we are her. But as she went so paranoid over such insignificant moments like lingering glances or smug smiles, it only served to highlight how much I didn't relate to her. Still, it does help the story stand out, but it seems unnecessary.

I also feel that the vocabulary is needlessly advanced. Now, don't get me wrong, it isn't that I had trouble understanding the story, but it just seems like fluff. Like, Sachiko's inner thoughts are long winded and employ these fancy shmancy words, but her actual dialogue is pretty basic. And idk. I was struck a few times by how disparate her thoughts and words were. It didn't feel consistent.

So, I guess I didn't love it the way I did when I was younger. So, eh, that's my thoughts.

You Poor Woman.

Light Oh I Don't Even Know What To Say About You Right Now. Oh My Fucking Kira, Come The Fuck On Light That Is Just Wrong!

I Swear To Ra I'm Going To Need A Nice L And Light Fic To Forget What I Just Read.

Overall This Story As Sick And Wrong As It Was, Was Completely Amazing!

I'm Just Going To Stick With The Idea Light's Assexual And Gay For L.

Nicely Done My Friend Nicely Done Indeed.

(No Hate Form Me Just Saying My Opinion.)

Another layer of tragedy on an already tragic story. Sachiko Yagami suffers the least from everything, but she, too, has her scars. Not usually a fan of first person narratives, but it works here. A fine story, written well.

That was really good... Pretty messed up, but good nonetheless. The second person perspective was also utilized perfectly.

I never be able ship Light/Sayu again! This was so sad.

Okay, I'm to normal. I don't have conscience so nice try!

Hurts so much. Ouch.
Good job!

This was so well written. This was the first fanfic I read in Sachiko's POV. And it's also the first Light X Sayu fic I've read. By the way it fits with the story, it could be canon. So so so love this story. I could feel Sachiko's pain and how she went from trying to stop it to not caring anymore. Kudos to you Author! :)

Beautifully written. Usually, people don't write Sachiko that often in the fandom. You wrote her so well.

You can see the desperation and anxiety from the way you wrote. The tone was really heartbreaking and it just hurts the reader more when you realize that she doesn't care anymore in the end. It was even more hear trending when Light dies and Sachiko just accepts it.

I loved this! I especially like how you wrote Light's character. I think he's hard to write because many people can't balance the humane part of his character with the ruthless part, but I think you got it just right. (I was also happy that you made him more conniving than sensitive, because, let's face it: Light is a killer and not some momma's boy. I hate it when authors make him too sympathetic). Great job! I thought the second person point of view was unique, and it really enabled me to view the story from the mother's point of view. Plus the ending gave me the feels :)

What's with the 2nd person POV? Sorry no, I would've read this if it was written in the 1st or 3rd person POV. This is like reading from two spectators POV- the mother's narrating being interpreted and written by the writer. It feels like I'm not getting the whole story. So frustrating! So yeah, rather than pull my hair out while reading this, I'd just rather not read it at all.

On a side note:
Funny how I've found the only non-YAOI Light fic so far, and I can't even be bothered to read it. Sad (

That was pure perfection. I love your Sayu/Light stories. I hope you'll write soon.

This incest makes so much sense, I could believe it was canon. Holyshit. Thank you.

incest is seriously not my thing but this story is fucked up and beautiful in a way i just...wow
brilliantly written and i absolutely loved it