amazing story

This is literally the most beautiful one shot i have ever read. I mean it, this peice simply stunned me. This is such an erotic, sweet, lovely story. Everything was so perfect! I never usually say this, but don't write another. It's perfect as it is. This beautiful story is like a gorgeous painting put into enchanting words. A cheesy thing to say - but I'm right!

you are a very talented author. You brought sensuallity and sweetness all in one go, you should have entered this in 'love through lemons'!

Very well done. I would love it to be continued.

Sweet :)

ur supposed to use these when writing dialog: " "

not apostrophes: ' '

jusst sayin. cuz that buggs me

WOW. EXTREMELY hot, very well-written! And in character, too! Good job

Fabulous story!

I loved this!

Perfect.

.:D Love it!:DD

This was brilliantly done. Your writing is beautiful.

aww. that was cute , i liked it.

Amazing, the way that you portray Edward's POV. If only you were to continue! :) I really like how you described the internal battle he was having within himself. Haha

I realy like the way your take on this story captures the love there is between edward and bella, Instead of just revealing the lust that so many others have mannaged to do. I like the way that you captued this pleaser to be forbiden which is a main topic in the actuall story.

This feels like it could be a real take off this story, the charactors seem to remain true.

that's it?

but it was so god!

mej

you suck right now...you didn't suck 1 minute ago but you do right now.

finish it! it's not done!