I really like this story you can really feel the emotion.I can't really say if the chapter should go now or later since I don't know what you're going to write about next so unfortunately until I see another chapter I can't help you with that one. I think it's a lovely story so far I hope I see more soon.

Amethyst

Please continue.

It's really sad, but very interessing. Good job!

Please continue this.

Very nice start (you do plan to continue, right?)! I really can't wait to read more.

This just an introduction cause there's more? Hopefully!