HAHHAHAHAHAHAHAHAH OMG U PUT INDIANA JONES IN THERE! I LOVE THIS FANFIC XD ITS SO FUNNY

Tee hee we mop poop priceless

Omg, have you seen that monty python sketch about encyclopeadia salesmen? Damn hilarious... Along with john Cleese and the dead parrot...

When I opened this piece I was looking for something serious concerning Luigi (for example is Luigi’s mind were to go wholesale into Mario then Luigi might experience the pressure of others expecting him [Luigi’s mind in Mario] to be a hero, the egoism that comes with worship and the synthesis of his fear into his style of helping people [more thought out then senseless jumping]). While my hunt for such a piece will continue, this was a good piece, albeit for different reasons.

This could basically be called a cynical parody of the Luigi Brothers. Every character is built upon in a comic manner (which works since these video game characters have almost no character to begin with). The characters and relationships are minimal enough for people to read into them and funny enough for a good laugh. Luigi went beyond what he used to be at points, but the world would crash back down on him which helped to preserve the sense that he wasn’t just Mario in green. He reflected on his state and had enough bad luck to make it almost the same as if he just ran from everything.

Some problems I have are that the piece does get too minimal at points, especially when it comes to describing location and fight scenes. Points in the piece like the original villain who switched their minds were lost half way through the story (the fact that I cannot remember his name should indicate that). If these parts were to be flushed out and expanded, this would be an awesome story fit for any Mario fan.

Despite the fact that I wanted to look for something else, every chapter kept pulling me in and I just had to find out everything. I don’t think a sequel should be made until this piece is flushed out more at the very least, but this is something more people should see and review.

o well... Mario shud really aprshiate Luigi more... i shud really learn how 2 spell apreshiate... & u shud make a sequl where Luigi gets his hat bak, smell free! & by shud i mean, if u dont ill shoot u with watever gun hav on my at the time!

:)

Luigi GETS HIS HAT BAK RITE? cuz i hav some kinda gun here... im just not sure if its a paintball gun or a laser gun. o well. Luigi BETTER gt his hat bak. for everyones sake. lets just say im not a great marswoman... (actually, im not half bad, but 4 now, we can pretend.)

What IS with the dang fedora?

...LOL.

I LOVED THIS STORY, NICE JOB!

~Michaiah, will nevah forget this story for lyk, ever o3o~

This story is really hilarious!

I'll never think of Bowser, any Yoshi's, or Mario in the same way again.

W.E. M.O.P. P.O.O.P. is the weirdest fantasy ever!

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I can kind of tell you have writers' block. Sorry. ;-;

But yeah, this chapter was okay. LOL, W.E. M.O.P. P.O.O.P.? That...is disturbing. Wow. LOL.

I guess 3-7 are good.

thumbs up!

O.O I'll never be able to take Bowser seriously again. I LOVE The Dry Bones thing! That was so funny! (ROFLOL)

Finally! Someone who knows how too use complete sentences! One of the best stories I've read in a while about fictional plumbers concieved on bad acid trips. Bowsers tendency to rhyme kind of freaks me out, though. Can you think of something scarier than an evil turtle thing who says a bad rhyme about spagetti and then melts you face off? No, because it doesn't exist.

oh goodness. this is just too good. :)

This is definitely fantastic. What a great way to start a story. You're not moving too fast or too slow and this is a really original plot. Very inspiring.