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Beautiful! I think you're channeling The author for this chapter! It was truly amazing.

I am so impressed with your writing. You've portrayed Maerad and Cadvan so well. The story is so heart-wrenching, but hope still remains. I want to protect them both!

What will Cadvan do? Will he admit to the murder when he takes Adian back to Innail? Will Maerad want her rapist to stand trial? Can we hope for a relatively happy ending? Must read more!

Absolutely love it! Just finished reading the Pellinor series for the second time through and I felt like I wanted a bit more so I came here. I feel that you nailed the character of Cadvan perfectly, everything he says just seems...right :)

Oh, Cadvan! I am anxious to see how Maerad will bring you back. She needs you. What are you doing here?

Will his ward work against Cadvan? I don't want Cadvan to be a murderer, but I hope he can punish Adian.

Poor Maerad. She is so conflicted. She wants love and the nearness of another human being, and yet since her attack she cannot bear it. You've conveys this perfectly.

This is so well written-so intense and urgent, and yet the readers-and Cadvan must have patience. Poor Maerad. I hope she can trust Cadvan enough to speak with him. If she cannot speak, she cannot heal.

Wow, What a heart-breaking beginning for both of them. Beautifully done. I can't wait to read more!

Oh, and just one question more: What is the meaning of the title? I have seen other people using various complicated words as titles which relate to/define their story. I'm only interested.

-Kangarooney-

I have to say, I found the beginning, oh, four chapters of this tale so very long ago. I found it interesting, yet so similar to many of the various spin-offs of Pellinor, it remained stagnant, not updated for many a month. I turned away, and forgot about it.

Recently, I've been attempting to update My stagnant Pellinor story, but it has been so long since I have read the books, I needed somewhere to remember how they spoke; and so I came here.

It is truly brilliant to find another author who has updated their story rather, well, REGULARLY compared to everyone else within this small community. And so, without anymore nonsensical drabble...

This has transformed FANTASTICALLY. In the beginning I found it rather interesting, but when I saw how long it had been, I wrote it off and left. Now that I am back - and have read all the way to Ch. 13 - I can't BELIEVE how it has turned out. You're doing a great job with the speech (something I've always had trouble with), the characters are definitely holding true to their usual characteristics, and the plotline has remained good and strong the whole way long.

I am now EAGER-ly awaiting your future updates; even if many months lie between them, I know that every chapter will be good - indeed each will be better than the last!

-Kangarooney-

P.s. My own story currently lies beneath your own, yet a year lies between our updates. I have not seend a duller community than ours, so very few people read, and even less participate in writing.

This is wonderfully written! I just read through the whole thing as fast as I could and I loved it. If you have written anyone I would love to see it updated so j can read it :)

ooooh pleease continue! iscadvan forbidden from fighting hulls, even?

Already done chapter thirteen, so down to chapter one! It should satisfy some of my lingering curiosity, too. :)

I thought this chapter began with some initial, interesting descriptions - not an action scene, but there's enough detail there to visualise winter and snow.

Nitpick - "the desolate landscape appeared more akin to the moon in its hospitality" - 'more' is unnecessary, since the landscape is only being compared to one thing and since 'appeared akin' makes a stronger simile alone.

Cadvan's musings on Maerad lost my attention a bit as a reader, but to a fan of the canon they might be more interesting. I felt that part was not very dynamic since there was no action or plot advancement in it, and because I still don't know the characters much. But a Cadvan/Maerad shipper might find that part exactly what they were looking for.

Maerad's racing scene in the snowstorm grabbed my interest again! I liked the vivid descriptions of the weather, and in that scene the character had a definite goal.

Another minor nitpick - ""I cannot travel in this weather," Imi snorted and shied against the raging wind." Since I'm guessing that Imi's telepathically communicating, 'snorting' is not a speech tag, so it needs a full stop after 'weather'. Alternatively, if 'snorting' was a speech tag, I think a comma should go after it to show that 'shied' is a separate action. ""I cannot walk," she stroked" - is another case where that isn't a speech tag.

Minor typo - "Maerad ignored"

"She felt something snap." - but I noticed you didn't explicitly mention any broken bones? That's what I'd normally associate with something snapping after a person being thrown to the ground. I'm guessing she broke her arm because it's injured, but I think that could have been entirely spelled out to clear it up for the reader.

I thought that Adian, the aggressor, came across as one-dimensional as a character; a generic nefarious sexually-threatening baddie. That's not necessarily a criticism, but a description.

I'm guessing that the part with Maerad after the storm is also the part immediately after she was raped, as revealed in later chapters. I think you were trying to let the reader gradually discover the details of what happened to Maerad? But I think that some of the language in the storm scene is relatively mild (such as "scolding her for being so careless", like a mother over some spilt tea), and in most of it she seemed wholly focused on the storm. I liked the description of Maerad in the storm in general, but I think more of a vibe of focused-on-the-storm-to-avoid-focusing-on-the-recent-traumatic-experience might have jibed better with the later revelations.

Overall, an enjoyable and interesting fantasy adventure beginning. Good luck with your writing!