Aw! You're pretty good! The only annoying thing was the grammar errors, which can be fixed by getting a Beta to read your stories for you.

Aw...how adorable...i always thought they would be good together...if they ever were to get together...anyway...spelling and grammer...that's it...have a nice day!...

I love the ideas and plot and storyline etc, and you're doing a really good job writing, but one thing I noticed is that you might want to check punctuation rules (especially for dialogue) because it was really noticable and the lack of puntuation etc disrupted the flow of the story. Other than that, good job!

This is really good but you need to work on adding periods to the end of some of your sentences, as well as commas, and fix some other small grammatical errors. If you do not have one already, I suggest you get a beta; they might really help you improve your story!

What a cute idea. I love the title and the theme.

It's reasonably well written however you should consider getting a beta to look over a few errors you have here. a question mark or two was missing, some periods are in the wrong places, fairly minor stuff. Sorry to nit-pick.

But yes, this was a cute little Eustace/Jill fic and I enjoyed reading it.