Excellent!

Its a beautiful beginning of what I am sure will be a fine romance. ((sighs happily))

How incredibly romantic...sigh!

OH MY GOODNESS! First, I think this is the first time I've come across a second-person narrative. You did very well, very well indeed, in keeping the tense and structure and just everything! Second-person narratives are very hard to write. Poetic writing, beautiful grammar (a few minor commas, if anything)...I've always held a soft spot in my heart for Ron-Herminone pairing, so this story surprised me in just how right this two were together. Also, loved the reference to Molly's distaste for long hair, and the "left-wanded" comment. Keep writing, please! I'm off to go check out the rest of your stories!

I absolutely loved this. Thank you, so much, for writing!

This is such a wonderful, well written story! You are really, really, really, really talented! I'm going to have to check out what else you've written. :)

Oh. My. God. This is absolutely bloody fantastic! Aside from the one tiny disagreement I have that Hermione would ever smoke, I have to say that this piece has to be the most realistic version I've read of Charlie and Hermione. It's so devistatingly gorgeous in it's simplicity.

Hermione's awareness is wonderful and acurate and Charlie's quiet charm and honesty just melt me into a puddle of goo. I'd love to see his side of this, or at least find out when he started noticing his little brother's friend.

i love your stories. you're a truly excellent writer, and not just by fanfiction standards.

Amazing story, very well written, with small details which make the difference. I usually don't like 2nd POV, but yours is so easy and pleasant to read. Fluid. I love your story, I read it with caution, slowly to savour it. Great one shot.

that was really sweet i loved it!

how romantic ! I enjoyed it !

Wow! I have never read a Charlie/Hermione fic but this took my breath away! The way you described the moods and surrondings were perfect!

I am rather in love with that story! Excellent job. And the way you described Charlie - who wouldn't want to be up there with him? Thanks I really enjoyed that, it was heartfelt and romantic without being gushy, something I aspire to! XX

Wow what a beautifully written story! it's like a surreal dream, and i just got transported away! i like the 2nd person tone, it's really hard to pull that off well without it being cheesy but you did it so well! my heart is still pounding lol. I love this sexy contemplative charlie! ) Very nice story!

I, for one, would LOVE to see a continuation on this story. I love how you portray Charlie as the bad boy; we don't see very much of him. Very, very good job.