Crumple horned Snorkacks live in the caves of Sweden. But they have the power to make you forget them. And they also send you back in time to your youthful days.

Tom Marvolo Riddle Jr.

Great keep going.

Luna Lovegood is the great grandniece of the good witch of the North. GLINDA

Tom Marvolo Riddle Jr.

Continue writing stories.

Great story

Nooooo
I mean yes
continue
I don't love it, this goes above and beyond my scale for love! its just...
Im speechless lol
anyways byeeeeeeeeee!

This wasn't the greatest ending and I don't see anyway there could be a sequel. I will read the prequel however simply because I already read this and I hate leaving things un finished.

You really need to remove on or the other as it is against the rules to have the same story posted under different names.

This chapter is short and pointless. Yes you had Umbridge arrested but it adds nothing to the plot and only seems to be here because you hate Umbridge. (I hate her too but in the past I only have her dealt with if it serves a purpose.)

The commentary is stupid, pointless and annoying. They will live, I see very few fics where Harry or an OC actually dies at the end unless from old age. Obviously you didn't kill Bellatrix because she is Bella's Mother and 7 comes up a lot only because you are looking for it. I have a lot of sevens in my life.

I like that he died... well not the way he died but honestly it wouldn't have worked had he lived. Harry would still have looked to Dumbledore to fight Voldy meaning Dumbledore would eventually have to die for Harry to actually step up.

See Rosalie is taking Neville's place... then again having Bella be the Girl Who Lived is cliche so Rosalie being a bit suish fits. But still you could have changed stuff up a bit, you know not copied directly from the book only editing certain bits. I mena when I first started reading it was okayish since you actually wrote what was written but the further through you've gotten the more you've relied on the books.

Seriously if people had read the book then they would have known they wouldn't die since you didn't give any reason for them to die other then the one from the book. If people actually thought they died... well they obviously A. didn't read the book, B. Read it but are really forgetful or C. aren't too bright. Not much has changed beyond the Twilight Characters taking other people's places (like Rose taking Neville's place) and Bella saving people... Plus Daphne dying and Moody not dying at the start when moving Harry then dying during the battle instead. These small changes mean nothing, they're minor changes.