I started laughing at the end of this chapter cause it said (TWENTY ONE) percent xD but its awesome so far :)

Amazing. Shame this story hasn't be updated since 09, but its understandable.

The only thing I would point out is that some of the paragraphs need to be fixed up, since it gets rather jumbled up and such with too many topics/actions clashing about.

If you do plan to update, please do so. Its a great story and I really enjoyed to read more!

Please update on this soon! This is such a good story!

Pleaseeeeeee update! I love your story, and I can't stop reading it, it's so gripping. I know your last update was in 2009 (I think?), but still, I hope you might continue this story. :)

Holy Ra! That was intense! I loved the relationship between Lavi and Allen! Hope you update soon cause I cant wait to see what happens next

If this story is ever updated, I will dance in the rain, shouting praises to the heavens.

Hmm. Well, I know that this review is about three years too late, but I would like to say that this story is pure genius. I absolutely love it. I wish that you would post chapter sixteen. I am hooked and now I'm left at a cliffhanger.

I love how you threw in flashbacks so often. I also enjoyed how deep you went into Allen and Lavi's thoughts. I'm very happy that you made them keep their relationship a secret instead of telling the Order. Another thing I liked was how you made the voice in Lavi's head speak to him. Very interesting.

I'd love to go on about how well this was written and how smooth it flowed, but I'm only a beginner in the world of writing, so I don't think it would mean much coming from me.

I'll end this super long review by repeating that I love this tale. I really wish that you would coninue it. I'll just have to be content with wondering xD *presses follow story button just in case*

Thank you for sharing!

I really like the fanfic so far, and I hope you'll update soon! I love how you also have parts from the manga...which I suddenly feel like reading again...(O.o) I'll do that later. Seroiusly awesome!

What an awesome story so far! I love the sheer amount of detail you've put into it, not to mention the little insights into some of the episodes. Did you use your own translations, or did you use subtitles from anime or translations from the manga?

I hope you'll get the time to continue the fic; it's in such a painful spot atm. ;)

Wow, I'm really enjoying this fic, and I'm glad to see there's plenty more of it to read! This is very well written!

I love this story. But why did you stop?

I'm so glad I came across your story. I enjoyed reading every word of it. I'm just sad that it's been so long since you updated, especially since you stopped at a good part. I just hope you remember this story and eventually update. I'm sure it would make a lot of people happy :) Good luck!

hey there ) I just finished reading your story and I'm really captivated by it! Will you update again please?

This story is sooo good. you really have a talent with words and always the quotes from the manga/anime. It really moved me. Lavi and allen are such a sweet pair, especially in the way you portraited them both.

Please, PLEASE update.

Thank you for sharing this with us )

I think... I think I cried a bit D: but in a really good way! It's not everyday where you find a really good multi-chapter Laven fic. I just wish you would continue it...

I especially like the way you switch back and forth between Lavi and Allen, and consequently showing us the pain and heartbreak that both sides feel... is it just me or did that sound slightly sadistic? :/ but really, it just makes it seem more real and it's easier to connect that way (:

umm, that's about all I can write for now, hope you decide to continue this story.

It's so great!

I like it

You really done well on writing this one

I really can't help but curious about what will happen next to Lavi and Allen

You really should update it soon XD

But most of all please don't let Allen die, I can't bear with it

I really hope Lavi can see Allen soon

I'm looking forward for the next chapter so please update it soon