This has been AMAZING!

A good, old-fashioned murder mystery with the Brothers Winchester. The characterization is fantastic, not just for Sam and Dean, but also the supporting characters. With your writing, it's easy to get a feel for and visualize them.

I can't wait to see what's going to happen next.

Hooray! Just so you know, I'm doing a little celebratory dance to commemorate this new chapter. Woohoo!

And in other review type news:

The first section with your descriptions of Amber and why it wan't a ghost that killed her were great, gory but not tastelessly so. The explanation of why it was a human and Dean's comment of 'Don't second-guess my ability to do my job' were great to read.

Having Sam and Dean doubting the killers identity in part two words well. Reading it made me wonder too. So many possibilities and whilst suggesting one option, its good that you keep the others open too.

Also Dean's big brother mode is fun, as were the coffee related antics. Great characterisation there.

Breakfast and discovering Lyla's murder as well as Rob's death were well described and fast paced, definietely loving the pacing.

I'm stuggling to think of anything to be overly critical of, if I had to say something you culd really improve on, it would be Deans's state of mind. He's great at hiding his feelings obviously but you've written him as being freaked out in one part of this, showing no other indications of this in any other part of your chapter. Maybe a subtle reference here and there to reaffirm or show intent

This is getting devilishly interesting. I can't wait to read some more of this. Did Ionia do it? Is there anything supernatural there at all? What were Celeste and Rob arguing about? The anticipation is killing me!

Wasn't sure I wanted to read this story, but now I'm glad I did. I love a good mystery. I can't tell who the "hurt" party is in the story yet- Hope its Dean.

Phewph! That's long but very good. I love how you've gotten Sam and Dean down to a T, and the premise isn't something I've seen done a million and two times before, so I'm looking forward to reading more.

The only thing I'd be wary of is that your characters don't blur into each other, which can happen when you have a large amount of them, and fifteen seems a large amount.

Oher than that, I really loved this opening and can't wait to read some more!

Wow! This looks like it's gonna be interesting! Looking forward to more. :)