Hope to see an update soon.

K

Okay, I haven't read the rest of this story yet, but I can see a problem developing, or to say it better it already has developed to a certain extent. This is a trap many writers fall into: The invincible character/OC. I've read so many fics with this problem before...
Their mein character is all kinds of crazy, a hero and had zero faults. While this might sound extremely cool, it also takes a lot of depth from the character and makes them extremely flat and boring. I mean, come on... Shinji can't process a months worth of data (?) in a few hours, that is simply not how brains work.. But we're in a fictional world, right? So maybe it might be possible. I'm just saying that this fic seemed pretty interesting to me, while I still expected to see some kind of faults in Shinji, something that makes him human, but now it seems pretty linear and boring. Secrets are revealed way too early and the conflict in this story is also missing. How can Shinji hate Gendo, while Gendo is proud of him, but Shinji also gives him a chance at the same time? It seems all over the place really, and I think you've got some cleaning up to do here. Not saying that the idea is bad, but the way it is now is not the best it could be at I think.

Oh and by the way, 10 dB is the amount of noise a needle makes when you drop it, or when you breathe. Even a ticking watch is louder (20 dB). There is *no* way a motorcycle can be *that* quiet, not even in the evangelion fandom...

Anyways, I like the idea here, but I think the execution could be better :I

bruh if your wife proofs this then you both are little fucked up but in a good weird perverted way. I highly approve of this couple

Please make more, I like your work on this man, please,don't make me beg to point of something inappropriate. Do continue this work, it is really good.

Nurturing a passion is much easier and more beneficial than crushing it. There was an old video about a teacher encouraging the sketch of a student who became happy and successful. Which is contrasted by if the teacher confiscated and lectured the student resulting in a depressing depiction of events. I think you might have seen that video too.

Also I love manipulative/smart characters, very interesting to read about. So this story gets bonus points on that too.

"He also planned enough plot twists to keep even the most celibate
guys interested."

Huh, and now I'm interested.

"We are the guests of a man named Baros. His tender kindness
shall 'endear' him to you as soon as you are deemed healthy
enough."

And now the interest is gone.

maybe shinji could seduce EVA? worked miracles on everyone else, and you did say that she's a girl...

Hmmm...
Misato

*Grins perversely*
The perfect blend of porn and plot.
Also non-asshole Gendo for the win.

It's been a while since you've posted. I do hope you're alright.

I like the story. Everything ripples from the small change in Shinji's life, and it's great to read. At first I thought Shinji was a bit of an annoying guy, but as the story progressed and I saw him grow, I realized that he had matured from a teen to a man before my eyes. I like reading the interactions between him and his girls, as well as between him and his father, and the changes that they all went through. The technical aspects of ATs was also fun to read. There was enough conflict sprinkled throughout to keep it from getting stale too.

All in all, a top notch story, and I hope to read another update someday.

Well I have to say that this story and chapter just gave the most well thought out and logical way to justify a harem. Awesome.

Great story. Hope you come back to it someday. :)

Mmm...interesting now is there was a touch of evil it would be ... TRES BIEN!

...dude I don't even need to keep on reading to know where this is going, Gary Stu and a bloody stupendous one by the looks of things, one of the truly annoying *perfect in every manner, the world must bow to me* types.

The title sounded humorous, so I figured I'd see how it would work out, but this is most certainly disappointing me.

I'm going to run a prediction, everybody falls for him within 1 or 2 chapters of meeting him, Maya, the resident LESBIAN falls for him, Misato will fall for him, hell, if I'm not wrong he will probably bone some kind of Avatar for 01's either soul or AI, all the while pretty much one-shot killing all the Angels and doing it all with such style women will probably suffer spontaneous orgasms just from watching. Nothing will ever beat him, he will never suffer mentally, he is pretty much perfection incarnate, nothing ever goes wrong.

BORING!

The only thing this story will probably have going for it is grammar, as surprisingly your pretty adroit at that, but grammar doth not make a good story, content does, and this suffers bad. Either make it satirical and make it clear this story is not to be taken seriously (Evangelion is NOT the kind of basis you would use for this), or tone down the stench of Stu. Seriously, I've seen Immortal-type stories where the lead isn't as perfect as your Gary Stu is turning out.

Sorry, but I'm out, I simply can't take this seriously. You've tried to write the story in a way that makes it look like it wants to be read seriously, but is failing at it entirely. This kind of idea can be done, and it could be done well, but the stupid levels of perfection your version no doubt pulls out of it's ass is NOT how it's meant to be done.