EPILOGUE

"Edward what do you have against buttons?"

"They stop me from getting what i want."

"And what did you want so damn badly?"

"You."growls.

Get ready for round two.

Great one shot.

i think you did really well capturing edward :) it's not exactly the same 'tone' he had in midnight sun, but it was very close to my own interpretation of what he'd do and think and sound like :P very well done, i enjoyed it

Beutiful! I really liked this. You captured the love and devotion Edward has for Bella really well. I think I liked that it wasn't racy but sensual. He worships her too much for it to be racy. I loved where she calls him a tease. That was hilarious. )

I really think you should try an Isle Esme fic too. The stories which capture their passion and love are so few. I really think you'd be able to portray it. I love your style and the way you write.

You're right. Getting in Edward's head is exhausting. I've been doing parts of Eclipse from his POV and it's such a challenge. I'd love it if you could take a look at my fics and leave your comments behind.

Keep writing!

Love,

Shavera

This was a wonderful LEMON!:]Thank you for writing it.

I know you said you overthought posting this, and I must say that I'm glad you did. I'm also glad that I stumbled upon it. I think you hit the sensual sexuality nail on the head. And did an amazing job at that. You wrote a very believable Edward, honestly one of the best I've read. Brooding and overthing yes, but still playful and very much in love, with the very human desire to please and pleasure his one true love. Once again, fantastic job!

amazingly done. i liked it very much :)

i would have liked a reference to what the original chapter 20 is about, i don't know everything by heart, even though i've read it three times until now... i guess it becomes clear during the one shot, but still...

i really like this! ch. 20 is probaby my first or second favorite chapter in eclipse! ;D

OH MY GOD !

That was so hot! And sensual! And romantic! And ... I'm at a loss for words. *fans herself*

Sheesh! Woman you can WRITE!

Amazing!

oh wow! That was totally awesome! I really love Edward's POV and you totally nailed in IMO. I think you should do more

That was awesome...you captured the characters. Bella really is so manipulating! Please write more. :)

Aww, so cute!

I loved the end comment about the buttons! It was a great way to finish it off.

A bit curious - you don't mention Edward getting dressed. He's not wandering around naked, is he? (not that I'd mind... :P)

BethandMolson

That was the most amazing piece of twilight literature that I have ever read.

This should win the Nobel Prize for literature. B and E had to be feeling peaceful after that.

About half way through the chapter I was thinking "wow, wow, wow, wow, wow! Now, I consider myself to be more than fairly articulate in writing reviews. But I am reduced to a mumbling a three letter word over end over again. Wow!

This is my new favorite- ever!

Loved it! I think you really capture Edward's point of view at the start. His thoughts are also a real enhancement to the story, when they could've just been a nuisance. I especially like "You have to be more aggressive, just a little. You're just reminding her." It seems like pure Edward-logic. And I like that he misinterprets her reaction, too ;) And your take on his mind-reading ability is brilliant! (How useful that would be :P)

I have a few comments (constructive, I hope!), one of which is a very minor thing.

"The intensity in which she road me" - it should be "rode" :P

Writing-wise, I felt it was a bit abrupt later on. When Edward stops because he hurts her, it's very jarring and I guess it's meant to be - he's out of control and his immediate response would be to stop, fair enough - but maybe some more of his thoughts here would help us to see inside his head and make the story flow better - to provide a link with what was just happening - and then you could show him shouting at himself and his anger at himself, rather than him directing it at Bella? (Um, not that I know any better than you! Hope that is of some use to you, anyway!)

Just discovered this..and floved it. Wow..so intense.