that was amazing

i like it, except don't add 'the end' at the end. the readers get when the book is over. you don't need to stress it. and u should probably mention somethings that are in the box. but it was still really good.

Wonderful!

great story.

oh that's so cute!you write amazing stories !well done

First off, congratulations for actually writing and posting an A Cinderella Story fanfiction in the A Cinderella Story category. ;)

Maybe it's because it's pure fluff, but it feels as if it's missing something. Personally, I think it needs a little something to overcome.

A couple of grammar things:

"Meanwhile, Sam Montgomery was in her cottage, looking in the mirror, trying to decide how to fix her hair."

It might work better if you take away the comma after "mirror". Commas are tricky little things; it's hard to get the right balance, but the way you're using them is a little over the top.

I do like the chocolate chip cookie breakfast though. Sounds very good.