UPDATE!

Ooh. Are you going to continue this story? I think you should. You've got a really nice plot, good characters, and I'm really liking what you've already done.

Great job, and I hope you think of about doing more on your story.

-Chinagirl18 :)

this is good hope you pick it up and continue writing.

the wrath can screw off(great story though)

Interesting start. I like how they found the passage by accident.

Hi there. The biggest issue I'm seeing in this fic at the moment is in its connection to Runaways. You've kept the basic premise the same, true, but what other things?

Changing the setting isn't too bad a thing to do. Doing this can make a basic retelling much more interesting simply by messing with the expectations of the reader. But has changing the setting made things different here?

Characters. I dunno about you, but I like the Runaways characters. Have you kept any of them here? I don't think so, but I'm new around here and I admit I could've missed something. If not, this removes a major connection to the series.

As far as I can tell, this is the same Runaways but with different characters. And unless the characters you've made are obviously better than the original series' ones, the story isn't going to come close to what most readers are wanting to find in a Runaways fic. Just some things to think about.