Nicely done! The words flowed well. It wasn't "superfluous" ;D

Ya know what? Claire has a point! Anyway, Mary and Claire make a neat couple! You did a good job, this one-shot is excellent... Yay for the word superfluous!

i like it sort of have never heard of harvest moon.

That was very, very nice! I'd like to see this oneshot expanded on, I think. In any case, this deserves two thumbs up!

Personally, I liked it. I'm one for femslash, and this really caught my attention. I liked the vocabulary used. I would like to see more of this type of thing on here, so I say continue writing as such. Again, good tale.

That was so cute! Omg i loved it! _