i decided to give u the 100 review! PLEASE UPDATE SOON!

love it please update soon!

love the story cant wait to read more

holy crap lol please update, and i think edward and bella should both be immortal cuz it wouldnt make any sense to have her become a vampire and edward not.

OMC! This is a really cool story! I cant wait to find out what happens next!

Please update soon!

Love Ya All

EdwardCullenManiac4Eva

So I finally read your story. P

I started this morning and at first it was a bit of a struggle cos grammer and spelling etc really get to me and in the begining you weren't so big on it.

But after a few chapters your spelling etc.. was a bit better and it was easier to read for me.

At first I wasn't so keen on the story, I do like the general plot etc... But I dunno, it's not really my type of story. I'm really into Dramione atm, and only really Twilight 'all human' and kinda different to this stories if reading Twilight.

But I carried reading cos I like you and you faithfully read my fics and I did want to finish it.

I'm glad I carried on reading cos since the whole Lonnie buisness it's gotten so good!

I like the twist on the original Twilight story.

I also really like Lauren as a charachter and I'm glad I'm not alone in this as she has featured largely in your story so far. D

I'm guessing when Bella bit Edward's shoulder she turned him human? Or maybe it was just generally the sex? Hm P

I'm sorry but the first few chapters kinda put me off, I kept reading anyway cos I thougth it would get better and it did.

I think that if you maybe edited the chapters at the beginning bit, or even got a beta to do it or something you could get more people reading.

I'm just being honest cos I do think it's the first few chapters that really draw the reader in.

If you like I can go throught them for you and sort out spelling and capitalisation if you're busy or just cba P.

As I have basically finished my exams and I want you to get more reviews and people reading!

So you just have to replace the old chapters with the slightly edited stuff.

I mean I can even beta all the chapters for you if you like.

I think your ideas are good, I just think that maybe it would help if you had someone sort out the beginning few chapters.

I don't have to do it for you I just have really come to like this story and I want you to get more reviews and resposnse cos I know you were upset bout only getting one review for this chapter.

NOW TWO! woop woop. Go me P

So this isn't me critisicing your work at all becuase I like all the raw ideas. I just want you to get more response and I do think that some editing could help. I mean the the first chapter had so many lower case and that kinda got to me. Yeah I know it's silly but a few spelling mistakes and it can put people off a story really qick.

So if you don't have time I would be more than happy to go through them and just sort out spelling and stuff.

So this is one hell of a long review and I look forward to your update. And also talking to you via the message thingy. D

X

gah! I wanna know what happens next!

OMG...I so want to know what Edward made for dinner. lol. Love your story so much!

Her teeth must be SUPERTEETH! Write the next chapter soon!

This is going to be so kool!

Her teeth what?

love the new chapter and cant wait to read more! please update again soon!

I'm loving all of the twists going on, but glad you are back to ExB stuff. I love ExB.

I liked most of the lemon, but I thought that maybe once they got into her bedroom, it could have been a little more drawn out. They sort of got upstairs, laid down and he thrust. Maybe just a little more build up after their kitchen activities.

She bit through his skin? Oh, why, how, is it the experimental drug?

Eagerly awaiting the last couple of chapters.

i dont want it to end! but i love it! :)

Nice chapter. I liked Lauren's reactions. One fault, how will they hide Lauren from the town?