where them dragon tiddies

Hello, I only saw one mistake, near the bottom.

Its tail, not tale...

that is all...

Hello, I only saw one mistake, near the bottom.

Its tail, not tale...

that is all...

i like the story so far plz update soon

Don't forget Favourite! U's are pwnage. Can't beat 'em. Best letter ever, because in the English language, it is used TWICE as much because it is automatically used after a Q!...U. Sorry. Just HAD to add that U in there.

good story!

I just noticed that I fav'd a story and forgot to review it, which is a cardinal sin. Time to fix that!

The story in general flows pretty well, though I did notice some clause errors, such as:

"He could feel the people around him dying. Consciousnesses fading out, like dying stars in mornings first hateful rays. " Should be "He could feel the people around him dying, consciousnesses fading out like dying stars in morning's first hateful rays."

In addition, some words were not used correctly, such as: "when only he and Saphira loped around this strange land" Best to say "loped across". Also, "as he a Saphira thought it most belonged" would be better as "where he and Saphira thought it most belonged".

You would be best off either asking someone to beta read your stories or reading through them very carefully yourself and looking for grammar errors (there are several uses of "a" or "an" for "and", a common typo).

As for good... your flashbacks are well timed, and your Saphira is well done. Your chapters could stand to be longer in general, but they aren't too bad as they are. Try focusing on a little more description of the scene; that always helps.

Keep going man, 'tis good!

Awesome. I like the last part, in italics, it's good.

I especially like the part about how people would go up to him and touch him. I laughed when I read it.

I can not wait for the next chapter, or where the story goes from here.

'“You certainly take no time in admiring the future.”'

WOW, really nice! you really are a step-above most ove he writers on this site. I look forward to reading more of this story.

Couple small errors like elvin, it should be elven right? Otherwise, im not good enough with grammar to correct you in anything else. I was enjoying the story too much to bother looking for errors lol.

How can you only have three reviews! Three! You should have more. It looks like it will be a good story, if you choose to continue it... Which it doesn't look like you are doing... Oh well, just in case: story alert favourites

so far so good! please update soon, im looking forward to falling in love with this story! (that sounds... weird? ... awkward?... you name it) just, please, update as soon as you get a chance! ;)

Good story, keep it up!

Wow, very enjoyable. However, you skipped fully writing AND and placed A instead. Other than that, detail is phenomenal and word usage outstanding. On alerts and faves. Just to ask, is this an eventual ExS story, like mine?

Yours,

G.I