Dang it! Why does it have to end! At least it was a good ending!

YAAAAAY I loved it! But I think that you should have added Sakura getting angry, because I feel she is too willful to just let Itachi take Sasuke away. Still, it was really awesome and I understand that Sakura getting mad would be obvious (I just really hate Sakura so i was hoping for a bashing, lol).

Another thing is that, I'm not sure if I'm just mixing it up with another fic, but I'm pretty sure during the time he was with Akatsuki, Itachi was teaching Sasuke how to weald the cool sword. I was somewhat disappointed that it was brought up, then quickly forgotten.

To improve, it is always a good idea to revise and edit at least once, the day or night you wrote it, then wait till the next day and repeat the process. This helps with catching small mistakes. I remember I always read one of my fics (I'm new, I only have two) and I always find some kind of mistake. Anyways, it's good to remember that the key to a perfect fic, is NOT to rush the events. For example, Itachi and Sasuke meet, they make up and have sex (to me, even if Sasuke was insecure, he gave in to Itachi's love a little bit too early). Even if I love yaoi scenes, It doesn't sound natural, thus making it not as good as could have been. Start long before your deadline so you can take your time and think about how it gets up to that hardcore part. In fact, the scenes between the harsh anger and the beautiful make up, make the forgiveness even more beautiful. However, if you are going to make really long "away" times, you have to make sure they are entertaining and do not let that time stretch out too far. Lastly, I mentioned the sword part, some readers (or maybe just me) take in every tiny, itty, bitty detail of a fic, so if you add things that the reader will think will build up to a certain climax (I thought Sasuke would weald the sword during the mission in konoha), you MUST remember to BUILD up on it. Or, if you weren't going to show the climax, its best not to add a whole scene on it (the whole training scene? Yea that's what I was talking about). But I still think it was an awesome fic, besides everyone needs to improve somewhere.

In the end I think you did wonderfully in this fic and I will be sure to read if you have any future fics. And remember this is only CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM so if you feel hurt in any way because of this, please pm me and I will give you a suuuuuuuuper sorry and computer hug you cause' you managed to actually put fics out there. I only have a one shot and a fic that I wrote out on paper but got to lazy to type it, lol. Good wishes for you! And... Yea, that's all i had to say :)

*Puke*

eww… gross!you incest freak!SICK!

i like yaoi but wtf! stop pairing up sasuke and itachi! they are BROTHERS for God sake!

are you lusting your brother too? yuck!

well i hope your brother or father or your grand father RAPE you ! yes! rape you! then you'll know how disgusting incest are…

i pray to GOD from my deepest heart to punish people who support this pairing and YOU who wrote this damnshit fic!

go to hell you patheticdirtyhornybitch!

I DESPISE PEOPLE LIKE YOU

aww - so much fluffy Uchihacest goodness - loved both stories, were both most amusing and cute!

Ah everyone was happy understanding soooo smooth I live you this great just just ...

If sasuke is uke he can never be seme never. I just like uke changing into seme but IT WAs HOT.

Notice how the loser below me reveiwed on the very last chapter. Which probably means they like the story, they just are too stupid and jealous to admit it, so they leave a nasty comment. I love this story, keep writing, I loved the end, but I wish it didn't have to to end, but every story has to unfortunatly. _

This is so disgusting. Why would anyone want to write about something as filthy, repulsive, and despicable as incest?

Awsome! I wish that story never ended. But of course every thig must end. :(

wow nice!lawl

Deidara has CLAY bird /bugs! sorry but i had 2 point it out

this was such a heart touching story.

you should write for a living. :)

THANK YOUZ!

uhh... Tobi's brother? isn't he an Uchiha too?

As soon as i heard about the mission i knew they would run into Deidara and Sasori! But i didn't think anyone else. WHA poor Itachi! Poor Tobi!

What a great ending! I absolutly loved this story from begining to sequel! I can't wait for other ItaSasu stories from you!