please have mai take care of zoko story

amazing

Haha, this story was short and cute!

Haha I liked that! U should write more!

Funny ending. really funny. But therest was not very interesting. sorry.

XD It was great Continue with sick Zuko?

that was bad

wow, that was a simple ending. but it was rushed. you can tell. but i liked how Zuko got sick now once Mai got better. i want to read a new story of yours. plz publishe one soon

That seemed a bit rushed...okay, a lot rushed, but it's your fic and not mine, so nice work over all.

This is promising. Continue soon.

So I think its a good set up...sick little mai and zuko...

i like script format (just the way i think about cartoons/animes) , but apparently people hate it here so its good thing you switched. Now that you are writing a true story, I would add more back gound. Give us some insight in what Zuko and Mai are thinking...

Thats so cute!

Okay, so listen. I like your idea here, and it's bound to be cute. But the thing is, when you write in script format, it takes so much away from the story you're trying to tell. It's hard to get absorbed in something that consists solely of dialogue. You need to describe how the characters are feeling, and what's happening around them. I think if you continue this story in a normal format rather than script, this could end up being a very nice story.

cute so far

update soon please

You're not allowed to write stories in script format here