This is like reading the book I’m disappointed

"I am a good liar, but for you to believe me so quickly/easily..." I H8 this f**king excuse! His lame attempt at throwing the reason for all her hurt back on her. What a piece of sh**.

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It is more than obvious, HE was the one that couldn't deal. And like most things that cause him trouble... he RUNS. His response seems to always be RUN AWAY. Chicken Sh**
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"You were better at it than I was. ... Surviving" - SMGDH. What a dick line.

Oh thanks Edward... Nice to know I was better at being a soulless emotional wreck. A Broken person that I didn't have to be if you wern'te such an emo ass, who rather run away from simple issues than talk them out. Thanks ALOT!

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Honestly, she should let JB throw her a Big Bone, just to show Edward the price of Being STUPID!

Early Edward in Most fic reads like an idiot. All his suffering was his own damn fault. He chose to overreact and over-correct for those reactions. But the main source of his failings was due to all the crap put in his head, and his failure to realize that the only person who could be carlisle is Carlisle.

Still... what a moron!

what a dick! he is telling her it's her fault for believing his lies? what a dick!

i really like your story and it makes more sense than the original, but the a/n's are VERY distracting.

they don't speak spanish in brazil, it was discovered and claimed by portugal, therefore...

You write really well but should refrain from using direct book quotes because some of them seem out of place. If I wanted to read the books again, I would. I'm not trying to be mean, I swear.

Different turned out to be mostly the same. You my friend might owe SM some money. You're a copy and paste master.

What a retard. Just bit her! Why run all the way home RISKING HER LIFE when you know what she WANTED IN THE FIRST FUCKING PLACE!.

I hate this FOOL your wrote up. What a SIMPLETON!.

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dumb dumb and more dumb. Smh at this whole unneccesary trip into drama.

Edward and his mouth pure dumbassary,

so no baby?... lucky them

THat volturi scene was senseless. I can't believe Edward...growling like an open asshole, for no apparent reason.

Yes yes, aro was planning on something, but it was easily talked down... ftw is his problem. Best self control my ass.

SMGDH at the whole thing.

Trill

PS...What is jake doing there... Thought he would be somewhere howling at the moon?

This crap is what I hated about the original twilight. Edward acts more like Bella's Priest or Orderly than a boyfriend.

Talking about Eternal damnation this, evil that, or wipes her dribbling lips, and only gives her only so much truth at a time to swallow, while he rubs her throat gently to make it all go down. SMH.

I hate when fanfics duplicate the SM B.S that we try to read fanfics to GET AWAY from...

Why o why did u keep the worse proposal in history in tact?

I hate reading early edward he is always a douche.