I liked the build-up for their physical relationship. And of course the blood drinking. Thank you for writing.

I really enjoyed reading your story. It was very neat how you wrote the paragraphs back and forth. Thank you!

The fic was nicely executed.

The changing POV was good.

The feelings and emotions were vivid.

GOOD JOB.

Please enlighten us by making more of this. XD

Very nice. I liked the progression from awkward to passionate. I think this is a subject that has been sorely overlooked in the manga recently.

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I love your style! The alternate POVs is very original, and gives the story a very organised feeling *is slightly OCD*

Also, both Kurogane and Fai seem very IC to me XD

GREAT JOB!

(MOAR?)

I really liked how it changed perspectives, very neat D

The alternating POV's is very interesting. Ooh, I really liked the part where Fai drinks from Kurogane's neck. It was very very sensual. Waah, but I want them to get intimate (sniff) Besides that, loved this!