ChickenTuna Sandwhich... XD

Beautiful. Just beautiful.

Hibari really loves Tsuna doesn't he?

XD

Nice fic.

gaaaah!

makes me wanna rip my eyes out when i read this, it almost made me cry D:

anyways good story

I LOVE THIS SO MUCHHHH~!

Wonderful(*)

That was soo sweet and sorry but sad oh well it was still really good! XD Please write more!

Oh my gosh, Tsuki-chan...

That was gorgeous! Oh man, it was sad, but Hibari's feelings were so tangible. Very, very nicely done! :D

NNyu u

dont giv up the angstness it is totally cowwl angst *shifty eyes* its very...er...awesome in...an...awesome way in not pshycotic*grins* woop!

-cries like hell- OMG you are one angsty person. Though I do know that you tried you best nto to make this angsty, but it was so angsty. GAWK.

I can so imagine Hibari saying that though...-cries-

You have made my day. LOLz

Thanks so much for writing this, keep up the good work, dattebayo~

So sad...I just want to cry...T_T I hope Tsuna is really alive in the manga.

aww that was really sad and depressing but I loved it!

It was nice Jari. It was slightly confusing though. At times, I wasn't sure if it was Hibari talking...

Hm...you could've made this have a stronger point/ impact. You're title is very nice, as well as your plot, however, the manner you presented it makes your final statement lacking.

"The sky finally left the earth broken."

It didn't really make me feel the broken part so much. Oh! And it would be nice with an elipses. [earth...broken.] It allows more emphasis, eh.

Sorry if Im being really critical on jou Jillz. Its because youre my twin-kun that Im actually bothering to criticize and think, instead of merely putting "nice story" or "it was...interesting."

Oh! And sorry theres nothing about grammer or spelling or whatever. Im not good at that.

Naww, don't try to make it NOT angsty! Angsty is nice~ Hmm. Lol.

Those individual sentences lend a nice touch to the overall feeling of the fic D

Just a reminder, though, that numbers below ten (or was it a hundred?) need to be spelled out.

'Wasn’t it just 30 minutes ago you laughed at that bastards joke?' Missing an apostrophe somewhere! :)

And I think it's supposed to be 'rambled ON', somewhere later in the fic. (Somehow I can't find it again...eh.)

PS: I know you just asked me to read your fics, not give you ConCrit, but...ehehe? If you're offended, please ignore this.

Woahh! It makes me cry! *sob*

Ohh.. I love it.. but just.. too short... but still i love it!

1827 forever! XD XD XD