Dude this fic is great! A bit daunting by the sheer amount of text and characters, but I like the politics involved. It makes the pokémon world seem more real. Overall a cool idea.

Impressive. This is the kind of story I would stay up all night just to read, it holds my attention extremely well. It is slightly more difficult to follow for me because I cannot pronounce Japanese names (I tend to skip names then I forget which character is doing what but a quick recap and I'm back on track)

I spent hous up past curfew to read it lol awesome

You know what? This story is EXTREMELY under appreciated. There should be way more people loving this. It has a great idea, depth, and very extensive vocabulary. The length is probably what's throwing people off. Great job and keep writing!

not bad, i like your references to in game facts like electrodes speed

Pity, I liked Mizuki XD

This fic is very different and very interesting, both things are good. I'm tempted to look up Saikano as I have never heard about it before now, and I think it would interest me if it inspired this fic. I'm very pleased at how tragic and dramatic it is turning out to be, although that sounds cruel.

I'd give a long review, but I still have to forgive you for killing Mizuki (joking. It's a magnificent fic and I'm an awful review writer)

It was troublesome to finish, and I had mixed feelings about it in the end. But to be fair, it was well worth reading.

The first chapter is rather confusing on account of the numerous characters, but it is very rewarding if the reader can track along with it. I consider the sexual content is a bit disturbing, but I suppose you gave fair warning.

As for the story itself, it was fairly interesting. Shiro's battle against Lord Iga was fantastic. The revealing of White, Gray, and Brown was also proficiently handled.

Additionally, you were perfectly willing to reveal the less marvelous aspect of the 'Pokemon World'.

This small excerpt from the first chapter caught my attention and held it for quite a while:

'The competitive spirit did not always lead to camaraderie between Pokemon and trainer: weak and lazy Pokemon were often abandoned, while others turned towards drugs or physical abuse to give their creatures the lead. The pains of loneliness, unrequited love, and heartbreak did not go away because people could own Bulbasaur and Pikachu: greed, revenge, hatred, and megalomania remained in the human condition, boredom existed in the age of battles as easily as it did in the age of video games, and those with little love or aptitude for handling Pokemon often found themselves caught in an unwanted world with no way out except death.'

I also liked the manga reference in chapter one. Very enjoyable. It was also interesting when the characters learned handle guns in the fourth chapter.

"Anyone good at Metroid?" lol.

The story was a little too graphic for me to put it in my favorites list, but I’d recommend reading it to anyone. That's all I have to say.

Ciao.

Okay... The idea is interesting, pretty unique and it sounds good in theory. Unfortunatly there are few bad points, the story Is well writen but you dump a whole lot of characters and background in the first chapter, it's very confusing even if the rest is good. Also the Japanese names are kinda odd, your writing in English, pretty good English as well, and yet you use Japanese names; which are very confusing to an English reader. The best advice I could give you is; slow down your character introduction and use english names for a start, then add more simple physical charcter description and generaly you could benafit from a beta reader. Despite that I do like both the idea and the direction the story is taking but the confusing chapters made it too difficult to read past the first chapter which is a shame because this story has real potential.

this fanfic's excellent, displaying just the realism i was searching for in a fanfic. regardless of how many (or little) reviews you get, keep writing. you're writing is excellent and your story is exciting.