No geral sua história foi boa e bem focada no relacionamento dos dois. Tem muitos vícios de linguagem e termos repetitivos, que não chegam a comprometer a história no entanto. Já dei minha opinião lá pelo capítulo 20, e aqui volto a ressaltar que o que mais me incomodou foi a personalidade da Bulma, que não achei fiel a sua personagem. Ela é forte, brilhante, linda, super confiante. Nunca ficaria se lamentando e chorando por Vegeta. Também me incomoda quando a colocam como uma preguiçosa que só pensa em dormir e fazer nada. De resto, foi uma boa fic.

Well, I need tô say that at this point of your story I feel dissapoint about Bulma's personality. She is so pathetic, crybaby and annoyng...Everytime I think that she goes ignore Vegeta and be strong, she crawl after him. This absolutlly don't match with her. I alwyas think's Bulma is strong, confidente, independent. I will continue reading and hoping that your Bulma change for better.
By the way, Sorry for my " English", is not my Native linguage.

Am I correct in guessing that English isn't your first language? Your story has a whole lot of potential but it's REALLY hard to focus and get into it when my inner "reading voicethe one that basically everyone has) keeps stumbling and halting over basic (and sometimes not basic) grammar errors.

If you are still invested in this story I would suggest getting a beta-reader and going back and slowly re- doing the chapters. If you're over this story, I would still suggest getting a beta reader for any future postings (solely based on what I've been reading here. I have no idea how much your writing natsu have changed since posting this.)

Thanks for your hard work
-M.C.

Interesting story so far. However you seem to struggle with tense and your writing could use more contractions to help with flow. Perhaps the most frustrating (for me personally, as a grammar nut) and consistent error is your usage of "did" vs "had".
"Did" is present tense and cannot be used with with past tense verbs, which often end in "ed". However, "had" is past tense and should be used with past tense verbs like those ending in "ed". So it should be "he DID not quite PLAN upon," or "he HAD not quite PLANNED upon".
Okay, end of grammar rant.

Thanks for all your hard work! And I very much appreciate your efforts to keep the characters canon!
M.C.

This was amazing! Truly one of the best Vegeta/Bulma fanfics I've ever read!

Cute story! I loved the slow burn!

the spelling grama in this story...omg

Just finished this fanfiction and i LOVED IT! congrats you made me so emotional. You respect each character's personnality very well. Gonna read the sequel now. Xx

You can cut the sexual tension with a knife

Im really enjoying reading this story and things are getting pretty interesting hehe. I love the fact that they're going slowly. Xx

Hey! I started reading your fanfic and i really love it!

Well, friendly date with Yamcha? I have a feeling that hiding her situation with Vegeta is not going to last very much longer...

Well Bulma, you could have run do the toilet. I guess. Maybe not. That's fine, you're gonna be okay. I guess.

Geez, aparentlly a sayian baby really draws your energy out. Bulma is completelly tired, poor thing...

Susprise surprise, Bulma! Lil' baby Trunks on the way! OMG, what's Vegeta gonna say! I'm curious!

Bulma dear, as Ed Sheeran would say: "Loving can hurt sometimes". But raise up your head, darling. You're so powerfull and intelligent. You are so better than that!

Haaa I just love how Vegeta is feeling awesome and Bulma is feeling like crap. Poor girl. But, yeah, can't say he didn't warn you.

Wait, what the hell? Did Vegeta became a freaking vampire now? Whaaaat? o.o Well... Ok... I'll just go with it, I guess...

And now we see Vegeta going away... I'm sooo gona laugh when he finds out he's gonna be a father ahahahahahah

"There would never be any proof." Noooo, of course not... Expeciall not purple haired and named Trunks. No way. hahahahahaha

My house, my money, my chips. HAHAHAHAHAHA Well done, Bulma! It'd be so funny if she started doind it with everything! My chips, my TV, my GR HAHAHAHA MY SHIP HAHAHAHA But then he'd just go away, wich would be very sad. But, well, a girl can laugh can't I?

I just loves how Vegeta had an answer for everything, and, let's face it, he's right kkkkkkkkkk Bulma Bulma Bulma, you just can't be away from him, let's face it.

Wow, this was nearly perfect! Exactly how I pictured: he just wanted a good fuck, and so did she. And, well, they got it. I was just wandering, as it was the first for Vegeta, how he would feel (phisically, 'cause sayians do not feel, right?). Like, part of me wandered if he had urges to be faster os stronger. Maybe leave some bruises on her as he is soooooo strong. I don't know. I got curious about his point of view. But, yes, it was exactly as it shoud be!

Oh she really DID sleep in there. I imagined Vegeta wouldn't be able to rest whit her in there, and, well we wasn't. That's nice. Keep the tension growing, it'll be awesome when you guys release it hahaha

Haaahaha noooooooo... No more contact. Right. You guys haven't made Trunks yet, so yes, there'll be more contact. You just wait and see.

And there Vegeta goes, try to give orders in the relationship, and surprise surprise! Bulma just doesn't give a damn! OMG I love this woman hahaha

Mrs. Briefs, best mother-in-law. Vegeta must be seriously holding himself back about killing her. So lovely and so annoying hahahaha

Well, we got a glimpse at Yamcha, and sorry dear, but Bulma really isn't comming back to you. She has a future with Vegeta, as creepy as it may sound.

Dammit Bulma, you should have entered the room. You were right, he would have let you in! Try again later, and next time, DO COME IN, ok?