I enjoyed reading this but everything happened so fast.

I think it would've been better if it's a bit longer.

You have to work on the use of punctuation marks. It really makes a difference when they're properly used.

You also have to check the words that you use. For example, you used "threw" instead of "through". When you write, it's not bad to pay the dictionary a visit from time to time. :)

I only noticed that you completed this 3 years ago. Anyway, I'd still like to give a review. :)

Continue writing! :D

Not to shabby, mnmonroe, it could do with some editing, but I enjoyed it. . I've got to say, though, that it would have been easier to read if you had merged some words together (he's instead of he is, for instance).

It was a nice length, you didn't concern yourself with overly long chapters (sorry, but it's not really necessary to have a twenty-five page chapter, for goodness sake, right?), stuck to your storyline, and blended your jokes in nicely to the conversation flow.

Sorry about not logging in, it's not that I'm so increadably lazy that I won't, it's just that this site is so stingy that it won't let me. Figures, eh?

Anyhow, I've got a learning disability, too, coupled with my ADHD it makes writing horribly difficult to the point that I have to read over each sentance as I go, otherwise something goes wrong. Pain. In. The. Ass.

First things first, loving The Traveler so far, I won't review every chapter (because I like to give my opinion on a story rather than a chapter), I'm just reviewing the first chapter to let you know about the threw/through thing that I've only recently gotten a firm grasp of.

Threw - I threw a ball.

Through - I'm going through a door.

awwwwwwwww! come on! dont end it like that! what dose the daughter look like? dose she have white hair like kakashi? you should have at least made a sean were he proposed in.

p.s. sorry cant spell

great story. very happy ending.

Oh-Mi-Gosh that was 2 good, Loved was 1 of the Few I've read all the Way through-Thanks-

Sakumo Hatake

hm good question...Kakashi's father was knows as Konoha's White Fang, but I don't think they ever gave hima formal name or at least said it...

What a great story I love Nell she is perfect for Kakashi. The scene at the police station (visa) was hilarous.

love it! continue please! update!

Too late the crying has started! Maybe it'll stop when you update

SWESOME WRITE MORE! :D

I like the plot, but there are a lot of typos. Maybe try skimming through it before you post?

Now I have to go finish the other chapters!.

great story cant wait to read ur new one.

AW! That's so cute!