Hi,
It's great to see that you've resumed writing fanfiction. I absolutely love your work, especially this fic, Give a Reason (all versions) and Yotogi..
Seeing the official pairing for this fic on your new website (Usa/Yohji) it really caught me by surprise.. When I first read this fic some years back, I had assumed that it will be Usa/Nagi, Usa/Omi, Usa/Schuldich or Usa/All..
Just really confused, I guess..

Talk about it getting out of control, Usagi better figure out what to do and soon.. I do wonder though how the senshi, mamoru, and her parents are since her disappearance. Oh please update again! This is such a good story and I hate to seeit without an ending.

hey i love all wk/sm crossovers and this is great aswell, but i wuda thought that the crystal wud have protected usagi from mind attacks or at least helped her protect with an attack to use against him other wise a youma would have used that as an offense against her already.

i dunno maybe im wrong it hasnt been mentioned in sailor moon.

i really love that all the guys have confusing feelings for usagi as it can cause so many suituations lol i hope schuldich gets it tho hes so mean. update soon ja ne

Idf things are so bad why doesn't she just wish herself somewhere else? Or doesn't she want to leave Nagi and Omi? SHe's being blocked from the crystal? No way! SHe needs to find a way to unblock it. Will she go home at the end of the 3 months? Does Schuldich know all her secrets like Sailor Moon or just that he's a she? Hope you continue soon!

I love the story, I hope you write more

i love your story

Update soon!

I really like this fic. Are you ever going to finish?

Wow...I really love this story. I'm not usually one for cross-overs but you've changed my mind. I hope you get around to finishing this at some point because it really is fabulous. I love the way you describe your characters and the scenarios are truly brilliant. Thanks for the wonderful read!

I really like this story. Its weird but that what makes it more addicting to the story. Maybe you should add Serenity using some of her powers. You seem to make her sound a little weakly. Over the experience that she had you should make her grow up a little bit. With past like that it bpund to make that person grow up ba little bit and more grown up

This story is really good. In fact, this is kind of like the manga Hana Kimi, with just a few slight changes. Both Mizuki and Usagi cut their hair short, but for completely different reasons. Mizuki did it to get closer to this guy she adored and Usagi did it to get away from everything until the marriage. But it still didn't change the fact that they were both girls disguised as boys and ended up having some of the boys fall in love with them. :P Update soon, I want to read the next chapter!

when u update?

o my gosh tis is so col!

aah

good story !

i mean there is no mamoru but is cool!

when u make er use the cristal?

m nice

*This review is for the 2nd chapter of Ai no Hikari: my computer lovs causing me head aches*

The DBZ movies are quite tricky, sine more times than not their plot doesn't quite fit in the actual cartoon series' storyline.

The same happened with the Turles/Taurus movie: when Turles arrived, Goku was alerted on that by King Kai and he also already knew already he was not a human but a saiyajin, when in fact Goku only learns about this from his brother Radditz in the series, and because of dying to manage to kill Radditz he ends on Snake Way on a run to meet King Kai.

This means Goku could only have met Turles in between Raddit'z arrival and Vegeta and Nappa's, since not long after defeating Vegeta they follow after him to Namek and fight Frieza. But that's impossible, actually, cause the year between Radditz's and then Nappa and Vegeta's arrivals Goku was training with King Kai in Other World.

What I mean is: technically, the Turles movie couldn't have happened in the original saga's standards. They kinda messed the facts up quite a bit there. That's why I understand if it's giving you a few problems.

Anyway, I don't quite remember what you stated in the first chapter about what happened to the rest of the Z senshi once Taurus killed Goku, but it'd be kind of important if you suggested Taurus and his men killed them, specially Picollo (dead Piccolo no dragonalls). It was what Phedre no Delaunay did, and since your story is 100% different from hers then nobody would blame you.

On the other hand, Sporanox's suggestion about the dragonballs being kept hidden is another good possibility, but that woud mean Piccolo HAS to still be alive, if only just him and not the others, and he would have to show up sooner or later so that it makes sense why the dragonballs are still functional.

(I actually think that'd be a better idea, cause Piccolo could be the one to remind Gohan of who he is, since he used to be Gohan's sensei... BUT, Gohan didn't meet Piccolo until after Radditz had killed Goku... he taught him to fly and trained him for when Vegeta and Nappa arrived later, all this during the time Goku was running Snake Way towards King Kai's planet; so, my opinion is, you HAVE to fix this chapter and state Radditz arrived before Taurus or this idea of Piccolo bing the one to remind Gohan won't work out...)

Actually, as much as it doesn't sound likely, you could state Taurus arrived during that year the Z senshi were training and awaiting Vegeta and Napa's arrival, and make up that Taurus' appearance forced them to wish Goku back to life earlier, interrupting his training with King Kai.

I am suggesting you this cause though most people here have seen and know the DBZ series, not everyone has seen the movies, and of those who did, not all of them saw every single movie including the one about the cursed Tree. So, from my point of view, if you have to choose between altering the DBZ series' storyline and altering the plot of the Taurus movie a bit so that it fits in both the series' storyline and in your fanfiction, well, I think it's obvious I would choose partially altering the plot of a DBZ movie that probably not everyone knows about.

(I mean: you've already altered the end of the movie, so why not also the beginning, a bit?)

On the other hand, Sporanox does have another good point about Gohan, and though I did notice you made the effort of justifying things better in this chapter, it is still a bit troubling for me to accept that Gohan forgot all about the existence of humankind, the very race his father and him believed they belonged to for most of their lives, until Raddiz showed up to burst the bubble.

My suggestion for this is you use the same amnesia principle Toriyama used on Goku: rememeber that part in the movie when Goku manages to cut Oozaru-Gohan's tail and Gohan turns back to normal? Well, I kinda imagined you could state Turles knocked Goku out of the way before he managed to catch the free-falling naked unconscious Gohan, so the boy hit his head pretty badly when he landed brutally on the ground... Being a saiyan, he survived that fall, but like his father years ago, his memory was lost. That, and while Gohan was still unconscious on the ground Taurus killed Goku.

(Haha, that'd work nicely, don't you think? Cause then, when Bulma found out, you could make her mutter: "Like father like son... Anyone would think getting amnesia was aleady writen in his genes")

It'd be the tad bit of humor in the fic, if you get what I mean.

That was the first option... The other one is that you make Taurus the one responsible for Gohan's memory loss: may be you could say he forced his scientists to erase the kid's memory, in order to be able to re-raise Gohan like a proper saiyan.

I still prefer the first one, if you ask me. :-)

However, what I would do right know, if I were you, the only thing I would do for a while would be to erase that paragraph in the first chapter that tells about Gohan crying and Taurus taunting him enough to make him snap, and leave the rest of the chapter as it is... Let the reason of Gohan's drastic change in attitude be a mystery waiting for solution in the later chapters, and you will have your readers hooked and wanting to know why Gohan is acting so different. That way, you give your story a tad of suspense. _-

Last, there's the issue about how on earth did the Negaverse find out about Usagi being Serenity when in the anime not even Luna herself knew it yet. That's an important thing you need to justify properly. In the manga, on the other hand, the only ones that know at first and for a while are Artemis and Minako, and only because they already remembered that in the Silver Millenium there *wasn't* a sailor senshi for the moon, and that, since only the princess of a planet could be its senshi, thus only Princess Serenity herself could have ever become Sailor Moon: her, and no one else.

In other words, they kinda put two and two together.

(The reason they kept it a secret from the other scouts and Luna was so that Venus could claim being Serenity's reincarnation for a while, in order to act as decoy and keep Usagi safe, since they knew the Negaverse would be looking for the moon princess to harm her and/or kill her and they didn't want the enemy to get their hands on the *right* princess)

That means, instead of Ami being the one telling Minako that Usagi wouldn't betray them, it should be Minako convincing Ami and the others that Usagi would neverbetray them... cause inwardly Minako already would know that someone who was Serenity reborn could never and would never betray her own beloved friends and guardians.

Anyhow, the reason I pointed all this out was because I remembered you said you always make the effort of trying to respect canon, and I hope the suggestions I gave you are able to help you a bit in that concern.

Hope to read chapter three soon!

Jay FicLover

update this story, please.

update!