OK, the last chapter did end a little faster than I would have liked but not as fast as I feared. Good. I've compared this story to soap operas previously and ONLY because of that comparison does the "larger" story feel incomplete. Keep in mind that this individual story is finished. This story takes us close to the end of 1942 whereas WW2 ended in August 1945. There seems to be a trace of a hint that Lois might try to adopt Terri, an impossibility at that time (unless she marries Steve Trevor or "Slam" Bradley). Also there kinda-sorta-almost seems to be the absolute tiniest trace of maybe something starting between SM and WW. Only future installments could tell (except that the last installment was 8 years ago). Yes, there were still errors in this chapter. True, this was an ambitious undertaking. However it is just as true that this story needs editing. Being as DC eventually bought both Charlton and Fawcett Comics I'm surprised that you didn't bring in the original Blue Beetle as well as the ORIGINAL Captain Marvel. Oh,well. I still stand by my "10 books/50,000 words" viewpoint. Even though the characters weren't invented until the '60's Sgt. Rock, The Unknown Soldier, and the crew of The Haunted Tank would have actually been appropriate as they were all WW2-themed characters. I'm aware that that is mixing Silver Age and Golden Age characters, I'm just referring to the time-setting of the titles. Anyway I'm glad that I've finished reading this story. I've reread many of the other SMWW fanfics but I won't reread this one. To repeat, there are way too many boring parts. Please keep in mind that I'm not saying that this story is "bad." It just needs a lot of tender loving care while being rewritten.

As I mentioned before every single chapter has many errors as does this one. There is only one chapter remaining however there is still so much unfinished business. Unless the final chapter is perhaps 25,000 words long I don't know if it will be long enough to wind up the remaining plot elements. I would hate for it to finish immediately in some rapid, magical fashion such as "Kablooey! They all lived happily ever after!" I would also hate for the story to run out of steam at this point and have no ending. I've seen that before where a story runs 10-20 chapters then simply "dies" leaving the reader to wonder what happened and why. Some of those unfinished stories were surprisingly good. Cross your fingers!

I have a tremendous dislike of the usage of slang first of all because American and British slang are different, and second because all slang constantly changes. There is an SMWW fanfic that is overloaded with British slang. Maybe the writer thought he/she was being especially clever, I don't know. The problem with that story was that it was next to impossible to understand anywhere in the USA. That is incredibly bad because the characters are American inventions and the story was based in part in the USA. Trust me, people in Kansas don't speak the way that writer led the readers to believe. I've also noticed that many UK (as well as a surprising number of American!) writers have little concept of USA geography. Supposedly Metropolis was based on part of New York City, and Smallville was put in Kansas in the mid-1970's (in today's world it would have to be western Kansas). It's 1500 miles from West Kansas to NYC by air! At least 2 tv series contributed to this problem, "Lois & Clark" and "Smallville." This geography problem uncovers another dislike that can easily be solved by simply reading a map. You did the right thing by temporarily placing the Kents on a dairy farm in Maryland. You also paid homage to the older Superboy stories by having the Kents running a general store.

This chapter has several sentence fragments. There are also several sentences that are almost fragments but would be fixed if proper grammar were used. By the way, I wrote my end of story critique early in case I were to have run out of room. It's a good thing that I have done so. In case anyone is wondering, no I am not a professional grammarian. I also make mistakes. I have probably made mistakes in these critiques. I do tend to notice the major mistakes but that doesn't mean that I've caught all of them. Absolutely all types of fiction in all formats demand "the willing suspension of disbelief." Bad grammar, spelling, etc. yanks a person out of that suspension. I also recognize that ever greater numbers of people are using the poorest quality of grammar. That does not bode well for English speakers regardless of which version we use. Consider: As small as England is you still have areas that speak dialects that are unintelligible to "outsiders." Mind you, I'm NOT referring to Scotland, Wales, or Ireland.

Sorry, I forgot-is "Mercy" your original character? Throughout this story you have at least a dozen errors of all kinds, sometimes more, per chapter which makes about 1000 errors (or more) in this story. Yes I made an estimate and did the math. You have grammar errors, spelling errors (sometimes you spell the same word incorrectly AND correctly in the same chapter), and punctuation errors. Sometimes you forget words and other times you repeat them immediately. For all that I know you might have syntax problems. You describe too many scenes in exhaustive detail when you should just hint at them. Far too many chapters are intensely boring even when they contain essential information. Do you remember what I wrote about splitting this story into 10 much shorter stories? Oh, sometimes you mix the past and present tenses in the same sentence. This story is in desperate need of a competent, professional, and experienced editor. A story of nearly a half-million words is a massive undertaking and should be congratulated in it's own right, but it would have been far better if you would have cleaned up all of the mistakes that I've noted all aiong. When one is the child of a non-native speaker of English and that parent is determined to speak the best possible English, one tends to absorb those same lessons. Anyway, I believe that your story has additional problems but that all of them could be fixed.

These last 10 chapters are finally getting interesting. The middle 30 (possibly even 50) chapters should be used as an exercise in speed reading or even just skimming. Those middle chapters just drag on and on. There are interesting moments, but they really need to be condensed not unlike the old Reader's Digest Condensed Books. Or, as I said previously, 10 books of no more than 50,000 words. Ten such books would demand a total rewriting and, hopefully, make the story more interesting. Stories should never be carried to such lengths just because you can. My Dad read had to read "War and Peace" in school and unimportant actions were described in exhaustive detail. That has been done here many times. Sometimes hinting at an action is the best recourse. Who was/is the Liberty Belle? I think that I might have seen her in a short-lived resurrection in the '70's or '80's but I don't remember for certain. I'm curious-is this Robotman capable of reproduction? The way he's described almost seems to leave that possibility open. Anyway, DC actually had 2 different characters named "Robotman." I've seen one in reprints and the other was a member of the old "Doom Patrol." The earlier version might have been a very minor character.

You've made made an extremely basic error in the operation of ALL Green Lantern power rings INCLUDING Alan Scott's. They are operated by the willpower that directs the ringbearer's THOUGHTS! That means there is a psychic link between the two of them. Even if they're not in physical contact they will be so at the mental level. Alan will still be able to control his ring because they are bonded together. That is something that DC has deliberately ignored in order to make Hal Jordan look stupid every time the Batman "lifts" it from GL. The ringbearer should command the ring with a standing order to protect him/her/it whenever the bearer is incapacitated. The Cosmic Rod also functions by mental directions but I don't know if they're psychically bonded. Alan would be able to command his ring to return to him as well as "pick-up" Ted's weapon and return it as well. I don't know if the professional authors have failed to remember this or have deliberately ignored it. Either way it's a stunt to make ALL GL's look stupid.

8 chapters to go. This one was very slightly more interesting.

I've decided to just glance through the paragraphs instead of skimming. This story reminds me of soap operas and their neverending storylines.

I had to quit reading for a couple of days. The boredom factor is climbing fast. I'm just now thinking of skipping to the last chapter. My interest in the story faded quite a few chapters earlier-I've tried to stay loyal to the story but I think that this story has pushed my patience too far. I might try skimming, something I should have done 30 chapters ago. I've tried staying upbeat and hopeful but I don't know anymore. When I started writing this paragraph I realized that this story should have been broken into 10 smaller stories of no more than 50,000 words apiece. They should also be semi-independent.

I thought that this was an SMWW story. 71 chapters and no trace of even a budding romance. On the other hand it sounds as though Lois has been cloned multiple times. Ugh, one Lois is bad enough and in fact too many. No Phantom Lady? She had THE best costume! I somewhat understand the need for the extended retelling of the Golden Age of superheroes but this story has gotten very tedious. It really should have been broken into 5 much shorter but never-the-less interrelated novels. With a maximum of 100,000 words it might be necessary to maintain a higher level of action. The quieter interludes could have been used for reflection, afterthought, and forethought. This story might be a better reflection of the reality of crimefighting and warfare (long stretches of investigative drudgery followed with brief moments of stark terror) but as a work of unrealistic fiction the rules are usually topsy-turvy. I am a naturally fast reader but this story proceeds at a snail's pace. Slow-moving stories demand frequent, sometimes even lengthy, breaks. This story demands both. Because of the slow pace it begs for dedication to read it to the end. I'm finally within sight of the end, but I've become so tired of the story that it's a chore to continue reading. There are no natural breaks, it just keeps plodding on and on and on. It just now came to me, what if the story "runs out of gas" after the 83rd chapter and is unfinished? That would be a nightmare. Time to step away and take another break.

65 chapters and we're only up to 1942. If you start with the estimated year that SM arrived on Earth that's one thing, but still a lot of chapters. This is coming off as 5 stories crammed into one huge story. How many people have really, truly read this entire story? How many have read it in one sitting?

"Bob Crane?" Really? The actor named Bob "Hogan's Heroes" Crane had a very sordid private life. It would be biologically impossible to convert the lower half of a human being into a cold-blooded fish body while the upper half is still a warm-blooded mammal. HOWEVER there is a sea creature that is a somewhat more believable model of adaptive evolution: the dolphin. The dolphin and other cetaceans are warm-blooded mammals that sometime in the distant past lived on the land. They are STILL air-breathers. There is also the very strange fish known as the "lungfish." This fish is supposed to have a primitive lung so that if there is not enough dissolved oxygen in the water it can apparently breathe air. I read a brief article about the "lungfish" only once about 45 years ago so someone needs to research this fish. Extremely deep-dwelling sea animals are very highly adapted to the enormous water pressure. When brought to the surface they "kinda-sorta" semi-slowly explode. Aquaman and his people would have to be super-strong and essentially invulnerable in order to resist deep-water implosion as well as dry land explosion. The people who created the various superheroes didn't bother with a rationale as to how their character/s could exist. When you're 10 it doesn't matter.

Back in the '70's Adventure Comics (?) featured The Spectre for awhile. That version made him somewhat more vulnerable to his own plight but also more understandable. It's interesting how you've foreshadowed the union of SM and WW. Looking back I now see that the "Invisible Airplane" was mostly conventional shtick. The 1970's WW tv series had extremely bad special effects when it came to that damnable plane. The Saturday morning kid's tv show "Isis" had far superior flying effects for their actress with only a tiny percentage of the budget. The "Isis" series came out a few years before "WW." I suspect the history of the "Isis" show might be somewhat complicated. I don't know who really owns the character.

Ancient Greek mathematics had NO concept of "zero" and as a consequence had NO numeral representing "zero." In fact, the Ancient Greeks had NO numerals, they simply repeated their alphabet with an additional diacritical-style marking to indicate that the letter was now indicating an agreed upon quantity instead of a sound. In the original version of "Cosmos" Carl Sagan stated that the ancient Greek philosopher-mathematicians, however, were split over the belief of "zero" (I don't remember if he said anything about negative numbers and the Greeks). The Greeks were so very close to inventing calculus but couldn't due to the lack of consensus over "zero quantity." Hindu mathematics DID accept "zero quantity," did have a symbol for "zero," and in fact had a numeration system separate from any alphabet. The Amazons are effectively a Greek colony and speak a dialect of ANCIENT Greek. Their mathematics would be the same as the ancient Greeks with the exact same limitations. Progress in mathematics in the Western World came to a screeching halt for at least 1000 years if not longer. Amazonian mathematics would be terrifically primitive, but a lot of SMWW writers love to say that secret "emissaries" (spies) would be sent out periodically to gather new knowledge from the outside world. The overwhelming problem with that concept is that the same spies would see that humanity was making a strong effort to change itself, even despite constant setbacks.