Oh. Panther wasn't drunk. And interesting idea from Star Wolf.

Wolf kinda broke the fourth wall. I like that.

That was amazing. Just plain amazing.

I can't express in words, or in actions (to myself and/or others) how purely brilliant this story was. You've taken the original Star Fox Adventures storyline, twisted it in your own image, and made it into even more of a masterpiece than it already was.

My heart wrenched at so many points, my mind quaked with the amount of thoughts bundled up in here, some of which including 'What's his plan?', 'OMG FALCO!' and 'Holy...Shit...Did that really happen!' (in a good way). I don't remember the last story which made me laugh so hard. And wow...You have a true writing talent.

Though some parts were difficult to read, as words appeared to be missing, etc. But it was easy to figure out what words were missing, and hey, every writer misses out words.

I can't wait to read more of your wonderful stories 3 Keep writing, and hope your day/afternoon/evening is going brilliantly.

Troy Groomes

You most certainly can. Just give me a mention in Author's notes that it's used with permission.

hey H-T could i borrow your pizzeria name to use?

You could always keep going making up oneshots randomly from the time there at SFP.

Just finished up and I like how you combined Adventures along with this storyline. It was very very enjoyable to read and I hope for more of this stuff in the future.

Wow I'm so glad you told me to read this, normally I'd pass something like this by but it's getting really good.

In short: I love it.

great story man!

loved it

Awesome job dude. Looking forward to a sequel. Or even a prequel.

Let's be honest: I loved this chapter! Apart from a *slight* capitalization problem, the whole thing seems pretty well written to me. So now we get to see conflict, and between some well known characters from Star Fox... Although how Panther got to find Krystal before Fox, I don't think we'll know.

Anyway, I'm slightly confused right now. Are/were Star Fox a mercenary team after all? If Falco and the others have flying licenses, I would guess so, but then why would Fox have a pizzeria?

Only one way to find out: by reading. See you in a few chapters.

Well great story sorry to see it end but everything must unfortunately.

Anyways great to see Fox knock that skank on her ass over the phone! Should have hit that with a baseball bat and then quit it lol.

Anyways great story loved it all the way through! Peace!

This chapter was much less boring than the previous one! It's quite interesting how you're slowly creating a romance between Fox and Krystal, and added Falco to the plot!

Same critic as always: grammar...

I honestly don't regret reading this story. However, I have to go sleep now, but I'll be sure to continue tomorrow!

Seriously, don't post such a good story "fresh from draft", it makes it look bad... At least consider going back on chapters later, and correcting the grammar?

So... What's to say? I like where this is going! Even if there's no apparent destination XD

I read a bit of your story, and I found it quite fun! However, I beg of you to at least find a beta reader, because it's horrible seeing those little mistakes that pop up everywhere. Apart from that, the story seems to be more or less well-written, and the concept of an AU with Fox as a pizza boy is quite original!

I'll be sure to keep on reading!