Man, I was so sure that this would end with them dying, but I almost squealed in glee when they lived! Beautifully written. I love how you portrayed each character. I've only read a few songfics, here and there, but they never interested me. But this was completely different. You only used a few lyrics, not a whole fragging verse at once, and it flowed nicely.

A job well done!

I love this story and this song has become one of my favorites since I have read it You did a really good job and I was wondering if you were planning on writing a sequel to it?

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Absolutely beautiful! Ratchet's desperation, Sunstreaker's shocking (though thoroughly in character, in this case) selflessness regarding Sideswipe, the brother bond that you bring to aching, tragic life, and the quiet hope and relief at the end. Beautiful!

I feel the need to give you my highest congratulations on this one. I normally don't review (to be honest) but this was good enough to make me feel obligated to.

I'll tell you right now, I'm not a fan of songfics (they usually fall flat). And there's so many one-twin's-dying-and-the-other's-freaking fics that it's beyond dead horse status. However, you've just reversed my bias on both points.

This was nothing short of excellent. The song you chose fit perfectly. Perfectly. At first, I thought the italics were Sunny's thoughts to be honest, until the OOC diction made me realize, 'no, that's a song, that actually works!' Not only is this the first songic to not bug me, I actually felt the song contributed to the fic significantly. You worked it in very well, never using too much song at once so as to avoid breaking up the story (a trap most songfic writers fall into, with blocks of lyrics making for a disjointed read).

Also, song aside, your writing was great. Somber, without being overly angsty. Dark, without being melodramatic. The surrounding characters were spot on as well. The little scene with Jazz and Prowl was golden. Ratchet was appropriately frazzled yet focused. Your dialogue was great, Prowl sounded like Prowl, Jazz sounded like Jazz. Sunstreaker's thoughts were emotional, yet considering the context, were very believable.

I immensely enjoyed reading this, short as it was, and saw it as a breath of fresh air compared to some things I've read. Thank you.

Wow... just really wow! beautiful...

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I'm interested, will there be more!

Very nice and well written. I loved how you got a different side of Sunny's personality when his brother is hurt. I really enjoyed this. Hope you bring out something else soon.

Wow! Intense, well done. The writing great.

THank you for sharing.

I never met a song fic I liked until this one, it's really good and works really well.

I noticed another reviewer suggested changing the editing of the song lyrics within the story but I respectfully disagree, I think it works better this way, like the song is an actual part of the story. Very well done all around.

It's crammed; kinda hard to tell lyrics from thoughts from story from dialogue...I suggest using bold text, indent lines, or some other form of separation. If you'd like, I don't mind editing it for you.

Other than that, yay for twins/Ratchet!

I usually don't go for songfics, but this was very intense and well-written. Glad it turned out alright. I thought it was a deathfic, but I was going to save it anyway because it was that good. I'm still very glad Ratchet saved them.