The suspense. I'd really like it if you continued this.

No, It's not obvious that English isn't your first language.

personally I'm seeing some things that are a bit out of balance. For example, Jasper and Rosalie are older, shouldn't they be the ones bossing Bella around and being the more responsible ones? Also, I understand fully about having favourite characters and it's great that you like Bella, but it's very obvious and I also think it's unlikely only her would get the abuse, there has to be some times the other two get it also otherwise it's unrealistic.

Soooo... I can't get back in my old account but I was curious what I used to read at 15 and wow. A lot of things. Needless to say you are super brave for your last chapter. The last but of my pen name but wouldn't fit on guest name was" bestfriendxX" lol. I was just curious if anything I used to read still updated. Clearly so haha!

Please wright chapter 16

Wright more stories

That literally just made my day. I started writing on fanfiction when i was about the same age as you and can definitely relate some.

So... I guess you're not updating anymore. Just saying, I thought that this story was interesting and worth reading. It wasn't that bad. Your 12 year old self seems interesting and I totally get that moment.

We've all been there. My 13 year old self wrote a "leamon" (because I couldn't fucking spell lemon) and everything I wrote was terrible.

For what it's worth, your story was in my alerts and popped up in my email, so apparently 13 year old me also loved your story.

Good luck with whatever you're doing now!

Olive this story

You are asking for flames, and bad reviews, but your story is amazing! The only thing I can say is I would love the chapters to be longer, and sometimes it is unclear what you are trying to say. I love this story, I just wish you'd carry it on :(
I hope you are Ok, and I am sorry that you are going through such a hard time.
Oh and, by the way, your English is beautiful :)
Brontë x

Alright it's really is great but I wish that Emmett and jasper and Alice were more in it

update please

I love the story overall and I can't tell English wasn't ur first language. The only thing that bugs me is that they refer to Charlie as daddy when they think of the old him cuz u would figure after what he has done to them they wouldn't want any association with him I also don't agree with edwars getting upset cuz he should be supportive of his girlfriend who has been absurd and is scared to tell People. that type of lie is an exception to lying in a realationship cuz it involves more than voluntarily lying to him ( does this count as a flame? Cuz I've never written one before lol)

Are you continuing with this at all? :( I guess not, considering this was years ago... but i REALLY like this story. I'm pissed at Edward though! :P I can't say what's bad about it because i really like this story. I read it a while ago, not sure when but i didn't have an account and my computer wouldn't let me leave comments, i've only just remembered about this story. I would REALLY like you to continue if you could, i mean you have probably moved on but i hate it when people don't finish their stories! Thanks! Xx