This was amazing. :)

I love this story! This was so cute!

I really think you should do an epilogue after this one, or valentine's day when Akane gave Ranma chocolate!

That was the best one shot I HAVE EVER READ! DAMN!
it was the prefect WAFFY, Comedy, accion , romance and drama and all in one shot,
I know ist asking a lot but PLZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZ don't let it die here, witht your writing you can make it a fantastic fic (not that its not alredy) and make it several chapter long, I would do any thing just to read a few more...lol

my heart raced as I read this...

Ranma savoring that little tiny chocolate heart... trying to extend it's sweetness. To be amazed that she cared... enough for the smallest gesture.

My heart is still pounding against my ribs, like a trapped wild bird would do if/when suddenly found in a cage.

For him to be utterly grateful... to the extent of shopping. His need to seek out something that would reflect his gratitude... for a tiny piece of non-homemade chocolate from AKANE...
is
so
perfect

I don't think Ukyo is as mature to feel guilt. She's too proud. Then again I hate her.

His rage... I understand.

I love that he did not get violent.

I was worried he would pop a vessel.

Love this. Love the innocence. Love the reaction from Ranma. I love that he soaks up any gesture of love or approval from Akane and can grow from it. I love how you wrote him. I love that it's so THINKABLE that a love starved boy could savor affection/affectionate gestures. I also love that Ranma is not so desperate that he'd fall for any gesture. His pity keeps him from verbally hurting those girls... and his idea that he shouldn't physically bully the weak.

Akane's not weak.
Akane's something to protect.

I have to read this again and again... I just... love it so very much
Thank you

Thats a great story ! I knew Mr Zephyr work, and I rode "Dreams" a few weeks ago. Now I have to read all your Ranma Fanfictions because they are as awsome as Mr Zephyr's ones !

The good points:
Great descriptions and pacing. Your fight scenes are awesome! Very vivid and well done. I thought the overall plot and character reactions to be spot on. Great dialog and banter throughout. Some nice humor, too!

Criticism:

I found Ranma slightly ooc in the beginning. Some of his external dialog was hard to swallow. Ranma has never shown himself to be that good with words around Akane, especially when flustered and about to present a gift. I would tone it down a little to help it feel more plausible for this point in the manga canon.

Sweet without giving me a tooth ache!

One of my favorite R/A OS.
Please do some more :)

i LOVED i cant wait 2 find more stories by u

Great story

A very interesting and compelling read.

In-character, and you've mastered an art that some authors would do anything to have.

5/5 (The only 5/5 I've given in three months)

Cute...

omg i love MZepher!

And i love the story too! ;p

Positively FANTASTIC! This story had everything it needed to stand out. It had humor, action, romance, and a little bit of mystery. I'm glad Ranma finally got pissed off enough to tell everyone off. I'm not surprised that Kodachi and Shampoo didn't listen, but then that's not really their thing. Hopefully Ranma can get her another pendant sometime.

I really enjoyed this story. I'm somewhat dissapointed of the lack of closure. Especially since Nabiki indirectly caused the pendents destruction. Otherwise it was a wonderful one-shot bringing a great moment in the expanded Ranma universe.