Best. Story. Ever. I was giggling like a psychotic maniac through the entire thing. XD

I wish I was in the Black Order Science Department...sigh...I can never win.

First off, a thousand pardons for taking so long to get this done! :( If you haven't seen some semi-recent posts on the forum, we haven't been available until now (our X-mas break) because school is ridiculous this year, but enough excuses! :) On to something beautiful...

Your fic for example! Truly unique and, without an iota of sarcasm, epic, by definition. This was a very fun ride through a very unexplored place with very unfamiliar characters and I commend you highly for creating it.

I absolutely adore writing for obscure characters and you did it with marvelous hilarity and unending excitement! John (Jean is how I've seen his name, same kid) has so much more dimension to me now and I'd have to say, though there's not much character to go on, you had fabulous characterization. Upon rereading this, I found quite a lot of very fine details (such as descriptions and plot/literary techniques) that really helped define him and your other characters. From Lenalee to 65, beautifully presented and often beautifully developed.

The overall plot is legitimately and epic as I said XD! And a damn funny one at that! I adore the scenes you chose to include and the Science Department details you chose to include (the paper cuts, which I'd never before considered, the experiment room, the hero worship of Lenalee) really made this a creative masterpiece. The allusions to modern society, the dramatic soundtracks, the global warming, and, of course (my favorite as an ex-Middle Earth denizen) the Hobbit, brought you out of the D gray man world a bit and at the same time fit perfectly into the story and thus back into the world. It was really interesting, hilarious, and very functional with your style.

Your style, by the way, held the whole thing together. Few people could write this well and you succeeded. I really adore your style, laconic at times but appropriately descriptive, a wee bit biting and sarcastic, and a very good voice for John/Jean. The way you wrote made everything palatable; the characters came across in bold strokes and the plot moved like the canal in the beginning of the story. Truly fantastic

Overall, major kudos. And a refreshing dearth of typos! But mostly comic brilliance. :D :D ;D

~H

Amen to the refreshing dearth of typos bit! XD You have NO idea how nice it is to read a fic where everything is spelled right! XD

I was in charge of entertainment and creativity in concern to characters and this little gem has 'em both, baby! XD Obviously, this was dripping with humor (as it is classified as such XD) and some moments were just SHEER gold! XD Sometimes the humor was a little overbearing or canned, but that's SO like the science department that it was actually quite a good thing! XD I very much enjoyed re-reading it and chuckling again...I think my favorite funny bit, which was kind of a motif and will lead me very nicely into my praise on your use and choice of characters, was Jean (or John :D) thinking of being a hero, specifically when he was in the water with that funny LOTR bit (this was especially great for me because LOTR used to be my obsession before I got into anime XD) and that "I thought it was part of the music" "what music" "the music they play for the hero when he enters a dangerous place" exchange! XD Ohh...I could have died laughing!

I thought you did an AWESOME job with all the characters in this and I TOTALLY understand how hard it is to write the Science Department (I did it once and it was both insanely difficult and extremely rewarding! XD)! And then your choice to use Jean (John) as the "hero" (XD) of the story was EXCELLENT! I was so thrilled to see a story featuring not only largely neglected characters in this fandom but largely neglected characters in this contest (Laven is okay but it got kind of excessive towards the end of the reading period! XP)

Re-reading it, I think I totally shortchanged you for points in the characters category. XD This time around I was especially appreciative of your splendid Lenalee (I don't write her often, or read her often for that matter, but when I do its always angsty etc. so I REALLY admire your exceptional humor-Lenalee! 3) and your humor-Komui (I have written him in both angst and comedy but I still absolutely ADORE your portrayal of him in the latter category! 3) And both of these were just icing on the cake to your Jean (John) who you did an insanely awesome job writing considering how precious little we know about him!

I could go on ranting about Jean/John/Midget (XD I will never get over that, I swear...) but I think you know full well the work you had to put into him and that it paid off! 3 I HUGELY appreciate your creativity in concern to your characters and the plot (even though that wasn't my category) XD And even unrelated to the contest, it was an extremely worthwhile and amusing read that I am extremely grateful for the chance to have explored! XD

Very unique and very appreciated! ;3 A thousand thank yous for your patience in getting this review and for contributing in the first place!

-bows-

-S

An awesome little story and I commend you for picking the science department as your room. So little is known about the scientists and it was fun to have Johny give us a tour. I loved the humour element as well. Another thing I liked was how you incorporated modern elements and references to John's journey (Lord of the Rings reference for example). Just a really brilliant little story and I have to say thank you for giving two of the minor characters their chance to shine *grin* Great fic and writing. Loved it!

Hm... Sequel: John meets Lavi who is terrorized by bookman and reunites with his large-appetited friend? Eh? No seriously, I think it was great, I was laughing several times throughout, and I would absolutely read another chapter, hope you consider it. ;D Great one-shot too, though, loved it~!

v_V That was so cute~ I loved it, each little section into the different aspects of the science department from John! XDD (I just remembered who he was... and that was at the end of the fic bb) The humor was hilarious (no duh XD) but my favorite part has to the paper cuts! XD

Kuro

love the hero tale comparisons. epic!