I don't know if it was creepier, but it gives you a written word of the agony of the shot that you see in the show. As it was being impaled by an organism is far more creepier not to mention the bacteria and other stuff...

Still could have been agonizing...short of death Sheppard would have rescued Keller.

True, very true. Wow, that sounds awful. I hope you haven't had any since then. Although, the experience does make for a good story. Nice job!

Great depth of the despair and agony.
How terrifying for you and your father! To see his baby girl in such trouble and for you not to be able to speak. I hope you've had no lasting effects from your ordeal.

a bug? or A Wraith? please hurry up! this is soo good! )

Very creepy...

Nice story. Yeah, that would be horrible to hear what is happening around you, but unable to do anything...

oh...usually I go for the agonizing pain thing...but you're right. This was way creepier. Great job with the descriptions!

Kas

Definitely creepier. You managed to convey the feeling of helplessness. Thanks.

it gave me the creeps ...

And finally someone that acknowledges bodily functions. !

Great job! I loved it the first time I read it and now even more! Keep on writing!