This was a cute little story with a few surprises along the way! The writing didn’t really suit me very much though! It was fine for a one time fluffy read, but I wouldn’t be reading the sequel. Also, some parts I felt just made no sense! Especially that Edward, the biggest fuckboy around, would make the mistake of having unprotected sex! Also his characters 180 turn was just too much!

Oh Edward, what have you gotten yourself into, lol. But hang in there, she will give in eventually.

loved it

Actually, you can miss a lot of days and still graduate. It all depends on your grades.

x) loved it

And where was the baby when they were kissing?

The Cullens just met this girl, and they're already demanding incredible personal information and threatening to call CPS regarding a situation they've known about for less than ten minutes? Bella needs to get away from this lunatic family! No wonder Edward is an entitled douche.

I didn't feel very strongly about this first chapter. I understand that this type of narration works for some people but I don't really like the direct acknowledgement of the reader perse because it disrupts the facade the story is trying to create. But like I said this is just me, others feel differently. I'm not really loving the characters even in this first chapter. They seem to lack depth and are just typical high school kids that will fit into nice little stereotypical boxes. The dialogue seems a little forced and I wished that it had more of a flow to it instead of the choppy way that they speak. Teenagers don't have many SAT words in their dialogue but it's nice to to hear some complexity in exchanges and something that is unique and new to the type of character. I will not be reading the following chapters not only because I do not have the time but also I've read too many of these type of stories with betting on the girl and they all turn out the same way. In that light I can sort of predict that this will be the same since the first chapter was not that intriguing. As for advice, since I just listed a couple negatives, I would think that making your characters more complex in their speech and personalities would seal the deal as well as having a totally unique and different plot then readers won't see coming. Happy writing!

I liked it

Just wanted you to reach 1500 reviews ;D

This chapter had me in tears! Love love love it!

this is soo emotionial. beautiful work. fantastic. i absolutely loved the last few paragraphs. i cried. i loved it.

Haha thats one of the best story's I head ever read, well done x

I was beginning to think this story was going to be a cliche but then you threw your curveball! Can't wait to see what happens next.

He's so stupid