delet this garbo

5 stars

Logically the are 3 type of ships in pokemon fandom i have seen canonical shipings such as misty's, reasonal ships generally this involves a progresion of what ifs that have a basis or potential one in canon like brandon and may(game version), and finally developed ships where the authors likes the idea of 2 characters dating and develops a plot to ship them like with Ash and Cynthia.

on a review note: the warning and personal thought are appreciated i dont see many do when explaining the why. the how is interesting trivia on you so thanks.
~ Akumu, The Semi-Immortal Cat

is it rayshipping or advanceshipping ?

I am absolutely loving this so far. Anyone walking into my room would think I was a crazy person, as each clue you give us has me theorizing out loud as to how Ash’s ‘dream’ (PMD:EoT/D/S) connects to the history of the ‘Real World’. I’m about 98% convinced that reincarnation is involved, and Ash is going to get the Dimensional Scream. Can’t wait to see what’s next!

This might just be me, but I found this chapter kind of hard to follow. Just my two cents...

Your 18 chapters in and there still in the first town.
Is this fic going anywhere?
And you change the POV way to many times

Sorry but I have to stop reading this, the rape scene was enough for me. I can't read books with them. It was good until then.

This story really needs to be put out of it's misery, let it die already

Haha, now I'm hungry, but yeah, that was an epic battle! I wish Pokémon games advance eventually to the point where gym battles are similar in games but thats probably wishful thinking at the moment...

This battle is pretty awesome with the rock climbing section, the crowd watching, the evolution mid-battle and learning new moves, hope Ash wins this.

Wow those two professors need to get a room together... Plus I'm wondering if they got together with Oak and Rowan, I wonder if they could hash out some more legendary theories?

Its Bonnie and Clyde not Bonne and Clyde but nice reference! Glad to see the second gen of Mystery Dungeon here but I hope Ash gets back to the world with his friends soon, May is coming, woo!

Or at least a chapter's length for the parts of the main story

Thats a weird thought... If Jessie and James are 21 now then they must have been 15 when they first tried to capture Pikachu... I thought it would fit better if you said they were in their late 20s but still had the appearance of a 21 year old before going into their description. Also I thought I remembered you saying May would be 15 at the beginning of the story but now she's 13? And I'm not sure if I remembered correctly but earlier you said Max is 10 but his parents won't let him leave on his journey until he's 11 but in the chapter with Max and Norman, Norman says its almost his 10th birthday where he'll be able to leave? Just some things I thought I should point out. Anyway, I'm liking this story, I'm glad you are using different POVs but you're not jumping so fast between each one it becomes disorientating and we don't spend much time with the characters we care about, I find it irritating to read when Ash and co. get a few paragraphs before cutting to a large chunk of exposition/whats-going-down-in-the-sanctum-of-evil-today? Before having to wait until the next chapter. I quite like spending a chapter's length in each POV.

Um... That bit at the end with the relative times everyone was born, shouldn't Max be 6 years after Ash and Dawn only be 4 years after?