Oh my goodness this is super good! Continue! Continue! :D

lmao. i like salem. and the others. interesting that some have one of the deadly sins title while others don't. one thing kinda bugs me, if their so volatile together, then how did they team up? perhaps that's not so important... but i can't help but wonder...

Oh yes.

THIS was definitely an improvement. Well done!

And update soon.

I would like for you to continue to write this story. As a fellow writer, I wish to state that I, too, have been accused of writing mary sues and "ruining the story". Please do NOT be discouraged. Continue. Let these sort of reviews bolster and empower you. I am looking forward to the interaction between Salem and Smith and Salem finding out that she is a program. This is an interesting twist. Kudos and I hope you find your muse soon... _

Very Well Done On The Author's Note.

Also Am Actually Gettin N To The Whole Smith/OFC Thing It's Like Why The Hell Can't The Antagonist Ever Have A Love Interest.

So Please Continue This Story As I Can't Wait To See What Transpires.

Appreciate those who give you positive reviews - because they want you to expand.

Appreciate those who give you negative reviews - because they want you to improve.

But don't appreciate those who never review. A critique - positive or negative - is a gift. It means that people care about your work.

Godspeed,

CSM

Oh Dear.

Well, you wrote "I can't improve on my stuff if you guys don't review, kay?", so that is what I'm going to do. To help you improve.

Fatal error #1:

The heroine/main character Salem is described as a perfect woman with perfect looks and mind AND perfect skills as well. She is already the epitome of perfection and every man's dream. That makes her character shallow and boring. She has no challenges/struggles and thus she becomes the embodiment of a Mary Sue (the author's secret ideal picture of herself, thus the author is projecting herself into the story.)

Solution:

Pull the heroine/main character down from her pedestal. Makes her vulnerable/flawed. Add a little dirt and conflict. Cut her heir. Lose her primadonna status and let her friends betray her. Give her some challenges that requires mind and heart - and not hot looks and bullet-time ballet.

Fatal error #2:

Agent Smith, the main male character, is already impressed with your mail female character even though he NEVER met her. It appears that Smith is already half-way in love with the supermodel looking Salem - and when he finally meets her, the romance will appear out of nowhere, they marry and live happily ever after.

Solution:

Keep Agent Smith in character! He hates humans. He hates love. He hates feelings. He is a pessimist. He is not impressed by a blonde supermodel in skintight clothes - human nor program. Make Smith reject her. Create a conflict/fight/hate. Create a believable plot, based on Agent Smith's character and his reactions.

Godspeed,

CSM

Promising plot, but please drop the "Agent-Smith-falls-for-yet-another-supermodel-with-super-powers" storyline, We've seen it all before and it never worked.

It is a promising story, don't kill it.

This means as constructive criticism and NOT as mockery, don't misunderstand.

This Is Great So Far But One Thing...Could you Update I really like this story but nothings happened and when you mentioned Agent Smith I was excited please update PLEASE :):):):)!