HAHA this story makes me laugh..I love it

OK. That was pretty good for a first try. I do have a bit of advise, though. I tried to be as gentle as I could :3 You can choose to ignore it if you wish, or call me self-rightious, I don't care. No... that's not quite true. The only reason that it would get to me would be becasue talent and passion are things that should never be waisted. These are just pointers that I've picked up from experience.

Each time you do a quote, make sure that it's a new paragraph. It makes it easier to read and understand :3.

Please, PLEASE add discriptions. I want to know what the room's like. Are they in Suna? Konoha? I need to know D8!

Get a beta. This is nothing personal, but I noticed several mistakes that almost certainly would have been caught if someone else read it over. No one's perfect, so Beata's are good things. Hell, even professional authors use editors. Several of them X3

Another is that this is fairly out of character. I know that it can be very, very difficult (It's taken me like 20 chapters, and I still don't have it down XD), but still. Here's some things to consider:

Gaara is very, very confused and probably overly cautious (God my spelling sucks today) about most of the whole concept of love. He probably wouldn't do something like this unless he had been dating Naruto for a long time, and trusts that the Blond won't leave him. This applies whether he's seme or uke.

Naruto would have faught back, even if it was part of a deal, unless he secretly liked Gaara. Of course, if that were to happen, the Kayuubi would have probably taken over to protect his host (this is why I have a hard time buying any rape stories with either of them on the bottom, especially with an uke Gaara).

Neither of them would enjoy a one-night stand, I think. being alone all their lives, they'd want the love for than the sex. Yes, even Naruto. He doesn't show it as much, but if you look more at his more quiet moments, you can totally tell.

-drools- THAT WAS FUCKING HOT! WRITE SOME MORE PLEAZ! -faints-

wow that was purely sadistic and evil of gaara... MORE PLZ!

It was good but the spelling errors kept distracting the flow of the story.

Consider getting a beta.

I would be dying trying write this, mad props to you.