Yay! Sevie got a happy ending! Me so happy! :) I adore this story and the bad grammar was just the happiness talking I'm really highly intelligent!

I know you've got a lot of ground to cover, but the pacing still seems too fast. The transitions between chapters is sometimes a bit unclear as well.

Re: "Much though I wish you had discussed this with me, what has been done cannot be undone."

Better: "I do wish you had discussed this with me, but what has been done cannot be undone."

Re: "...Who, besides Severus and myself know what has happened?"

Should be "knows" to agree with "who". Test this by writing: Who know what has happened vs. Who knows what has happened.

I'm trying to be helpful, so please don't be offended. Maybe two beta-readers are better than one.

Still enjoying your story.

I'm enjoying this story, but I'm wondering if the pacing is moving along a bit too swiftly. Should Phoebe declare her love as early as the second chapter? What has Snape done aside from laugh at a few of her jokes and exchange some plesantries?

Why, exactly does she love him? I don't know where you're taking this yet, of course, so I'll keep reading. You have a very nice control of your prose and the dialogue is flowing well.

"Ned"
I can take criticism, as long as it's actually valid. You said in the review that follows this one that my writing skills are limited. Perhaps. They are not as limited as your reading skills, however. You complained about Snape's romantic interests "always" being American. The story clearly states the romantic interest in my story is BRITISH and has spent time in Canada and America (studying runes... the story doesn't state it, but a working knowledge of the topic would lead one to conclude she had been in the upper midwest of America, as well as south-central and eastern Canada.) Diss my writing skills all you want, but if you're going to critique details please get 'em right.

I don't understand. What is this urgent need to make Snape's possible romances American? Why not English, French, Chinese, Tunisian, Indonesian...?
Your writing skills are slightly limited...to say the least.

i think this story was greate plz plz plz plz plz do a sequel

i loved the story are you doing a sequel please do

Wow, I read your whole story and its fabulous. I can't wait for a sequel, and keep up the FAB work!

~lindsey

nice fan fic

When you first told us that she was pregnant I almost stopped reading because I was terrified that you were turning your extraordinary story into smut, but you didn't and I still love it! :):):):):):)):):

Excellent story! Well written, absorbing plot...

I'll keep an eye out for any sequels!

OMG! that was sooooo good ... it kept me hooked! i had 2 read it in installments- it took me about a week! i also had 2 keep relaying it back 2 my friend who is in love with snape! i cant put in2 words how good i thought it was ... pls read my story n the lone chapter me n my m8 r writin (its a snape romance, with herself as the heroine!)its obv. a work in progress! email me, or review, wateva.

hannah xXx

So... *looks around awkwardly* When are you gonna write another fanfic...?

Have you written anything under a different pen name?

Ayod

I just discovered this story. I like it so far!

Please tell me your going to be continueing this... *laughing* Love the ending. Aphrodisia was a rare side effect... *snort* Well, at least they got to have some fun in the end.