I hope u don't get depressed again.

I'm sorry but it was a bit short but vary well written!

Wow that was... Wow!

Lelouch is the same age as Suzaku u know?

Wow...

It's a bit confeusing!?

i hate gino

I like your description of Gino..really he's a "light" in the dark.

So, good chapter. I continue to read.

Sato is the most common Japanese name

:3 if I write it 20 time will you accept that? :3

I'm being completely honest with you, this story has a good plot line, but, Lelouch seems a bit too OOC for my liking. It must just may be me, but some parts of the story are a little hard to follow, and there are a some common grammar mistakes. So I would suggest that you'd have a beta read over your writing and you read over it too to make sure everything flows.

I, myself am not a writer, I'm just trying to help. No hard feelings :)

ahh sexyy..kinda rapid, but very well written. WOW, lulu is amazing for a 14 year old..lol

Yeah...

You see, when I first started reading the story, which was about 20 minutes ago, (yeah, I just found it) I was thinking this was a LuluxSuzaku story, with Lulu (sadly, I like it this way mostly) on the bottom, like the good kitten he should be.

I...I gave it a chance. Lelouch was very OOCish, Suzaku was kind of weird with all this Gino Gino business.I love how cute Gino was, but I don't like Gino centric in my Suzaku Lelouch smexy stories, so it kind of put me off.

I continued reading on, you know, maybe Lulu would turn into this adorable mess after he experienced the most horrifying kidnapping ever, or maybe Suzaku would notice how adorable Lulu really is (cuz let's admit it, that violet eyed prince is absolutely gorgeous and should be totally raped at some point in his life-I've got issues')

But, NO! NO, That didn't happen, instead, Suzaku is 'raped' by Lulu after he goes blind (sorry, I kind of skipped to chapter 13th ending after 8, so I don't know developments).

S... To tell you the truth, I was rather ready to roll with this little rape thing... until Lulu told Suzaku "I love you." to which Suzaku thought: GINO! (- I'm so furious about this I almost killed my keyboard writing this word!)

GAH! COME ON! WTF! This is chapter 8, and the story is clearly tagged Suzaku K. & Lelouch L. So way is Suzaku yearning for Gino was cute Lulu is moaning on top of him? (which also killed me: chapter 13, how Suzaku was all like, 'yeah, when we went to Japan on this field trip, Lelouch took me...'...OH MY GOD (Again, death of a keyboard) Lulu was freaking 14 years old, a freaking weak little prince how could barely go up two stair cases without panting for his life, and Suzaku, the 18 year old knight, that is a freaking warrior or whateve, couldn't stop the little boy from practically giving him an handjob and riding on him? Its not like he couldn't grab his hands of waist and hoist his away from him, Lulu was practically breathing down his neck.)

I didn't read chapters 10-14, and I realize that you killed Lulu... and I honestly don't have comment on that but: "seriously? You killed Lulu because he 'took' Suzaku as the bottom?"

So yeah, this is not to say that you are a bad writer, because you are not, and I've read the other thingy you wrote, the chapter long thing that is completely canon (I think that's the right term for that), an I kind of like it, even though I'm not into the completely random ones.

Even with this story, you wrote well, but you need to think carefully about the plot and the characters, you can't just say that Lulu does this and that just because he believes Suzaku loves his -cuz he saved his life- because Suzaku is there as his body guard-, well, you can, but the reviewer wouldn't be very understanding.

Again, the biggest part that really made me just close the tab as soon as I read it. Gino! Please, next time, when you write a summary, and your story is going to put Gino and Suzaku together, please...PLEASE, start with something like: "Suzaku Korusagi (or what ever his last name is) is Nunelly Lamperouge's body guard, and blah blah blah. You need to explain the readers that the story is going to be about Suzaku, not Lelouch, and that Suzaku isn't into Lulu as much as he into Gino, which will also should make you want to choose Gino as your second character choice.

(I was really disappointed you know, this review isn't a flame or anything, I was just really sad about the fact that Lulu didn't get Suzaku)

I'm going to stop now, because as fun as it is to watch the numbers of characters I have left become smaller and smaller, its 12:42 am and I'm supposed to be studying to my chem exam, which is tomorrow...

So this is it, if you decide to write an actual SuzakuxLelouch (because Lulu is best on the bottom), please send me a message, I'll read and review for you!

Sorry this is so long, I wasted almost 40 letters and I'm writing so I will actually reach...oh, I'm over 40.

I'm A PureEvil.

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I didn't really want to review this story, but I decided to anyways. personally, I didn't care for that it was poorly written though. I mean sure there were a few spelling mistakes and grammatical errors, but no one is perfect. I did not like the story idea was not a great one. I'm not going to lie. I was hoping for suzalulu and personally this doesn't count. especially the way you portrayed Lelouch and Suzaku. you made Suzaku out to be a basically spineless pansy who does not know how to say no. Lelouch, although he is a bit arrogant and thinks highly of himself, I think that you took it a bit too was far to cruel, and seemingly heartless. I am sorry if this review seems cruel at was not the intention. constructive criticism. I have a feeling that if you had had a better idea, that you would have had a better fanfic. you are a fully capable writer, I think you just hit a wall.

that is my own personal opinion,however. take it as you will.

They are all insane.

Dude! You are? OO! looking forward to it! _