it was amazing please keep writting

Hi Mitsumistar here. I really like this. It's pretty interseting. Keep up the good work. I look forward to reading more.

HURRY UP ALREADY!. shut up bender,but listen to him srsly

It was great keep on writing you get writer

this is very curious, i like the way you describe your fingers, expecting something to happen. it gives the story a great dynamic of forshadowing. good job. i was actually looking up how to get past that exact part of the game because i too am stuck in oddworld so to speak. it was by sheer coinscedince that you explain how to do it in your story. i was trying to use that secret door that takes you behind the scribe on another platform, but that just leads to a bird portal. anyways thanyou, i am going to try to jump in the pit and get out befor the scribe gets me(:

i read your story a long time ago when i applied to fanfiction i was a teen then and i loved it i hope
you can update it soon and make new ones your story was really cool

okay, this an awesome story so far! there is two down sides, it's going a little too fast IMO, and you miss spelled gentle... but all in all, I'd give it 4 stars. I would really appreciate it if you updated soon!

oo! I usually find many stories that are really slow paced and stuff, start boring , and soon the words become "blah blablah. blah blah blahblah blah." and it feels like you're reading a summary. yours is the complete OPPOSITE of that! it's fast paced, yet not too fast, just perfect! :D and it gets to the point without being too hasty. :3

this seems pretty neat! I wasn't too keen on a AbexOc, but I decided to try it. nice first chapter too! it really draws you in!

its ok but the story seems to push the idea of the story too hard try being creative and then this story might be pretty good

It's so so cute :3 Please continued.

Questions :
Is this happening before the introduction of the game ?
Doesn't Abe know that himself and his people in the new menu ?

This was a good story...

Until I read this :

"Your tired, I can tell," Abe said in a soft genital voice, the kind of voice that…someone who really cares for would sound like.

and now I can't take it seriously anymore.

Awwww! How sweet. You've got the love plot down right now, but there's a little problem... How come you haven't updated in 2 freakin years? UPDATE THIS GOOD STORY!

coool do another one please :)

PLEASE continue this~ Even though it's been a year. It's really good, and cute~