I like your story but do you really have to kill Renji?It way ooc

why did u have to kill renji omg i hste u for that but the rest i liked i dont think Renji would do that but o well god job

i think that the beginning was good but how you went straight to the lemon was really bad. can you revise it a bit? and i don't like how you put renji as the bad guy.

What the hell.

i think i gonna like this story, huh?

are you sure this is your first fanfic? i do not think so.

but, i like this one.

i hope you want to make another story, friend.

but, hotter than this fic.

-my apologize, hotter is my friend said-

I think that your story is interesting and that you're a good writer. :)

wah,... i dont like the story...

shocking, O_O

you did good but you forgot to spell check and Rukia is very Out Of Character ..might wanna make her a bit more bossy, regal and well tough love/dominating/aggressive next time you make a bleach fan fic and Ichigo needs a little more aggressiveness to him as well. But over all good try