I really enjoyed this story. I wanted a big red pen to edit it, but the plot was good! The end with James felt rushed and odd. I think you just wanted to finish and I'm thankful for that. I think that Edward would have made marriage plans and vampire plans. His personality would have tried to secure her hand immediately when he knew he loved her. I think he would have thrown convention to the wind and gotten engaged in high school! It felt a little fake to have their personalities fall flat at the end. And how did they go from Homecoming (and I thought it was a girls choice dance?) to baseball the next day to Prom while his arm was in a cast I assume? Seems super rushed.

A great starting chapter. It got me really interested.

i think you should have maintained edward's character in your fic like you have maintained Bella's and everyone else's.
for eg: when he says "she is hot" it should have been "she is beautiful or elegant" something like that.
i just think edward should have been more gentlemanly.

but hey, i havent read it whole.

other than that, it's great! keep up the good work!

The phrase '' And so the lion fell in love with the lamb'' , in Italian it's ''e così il leone si innamorò dell'agnello''. The phrase is beautiful in whatever language :) I loved this story so much, good job Will there be a continuation of New Moon?

Cute story. Thanks for writing it

That was cute

So weird. Bring back vampire

It seems a little strange reading the mixed up story. But I like it.

I like it so far, but it annoys the living crap out of me that she keeps spelling secret wrong!

I love this story sooo much! I just wanna guess. Its just a guess. But does the Italian sentence mean "and so the lion fell in love with the lamb"? I was think it would be perfect if it were that. I'm gonna look it up after I read the rest of the story.

love it so far XD

That must have been horrible! Sorry, I know I'm a late reader of this story, but I REALLY love this plot! I used to be story writer to until I saw how random they were. So I stopped and contiued sketching and painting.
(I LOVE YOUR WORK)

-there is no such thing as automatic doors, just gentlemen ninjas!

I liked very much and I wondered if I would have

Amazing! Outstanding! Absolutely phenomenal! Great great work and writing! I read three other stories with this plot and hated them all. So glad to finally find one I liked- not I can read something different! Hahaha

It was interesting.