Nice ending. Well rounded. I kind of wonder how Tanis is feeling...

Nice work great stroy i'd really like to see another mass effect stroy by you cause this one was brilliant!

Very good story I hope you do a sequel.

Very nice ending. It was sweet, sort of like a Kodak moment, a very odd Kodak moment, but a Kodak moment nonetheless. You say you are interested in doing another Mass Effect story, so what do you have in mind? I'm interested.

Is this the end of the story? If it is then I must say great work with the ending. Gotta love Wrex. He is one of the best characters from Mass Effect, a bit like a Canderous/Predator mix. He absolutely rocks. Great fic. I will be adding it to my favorites.

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Class Fic! well written and full of action. Good work. plus I liked the little Air Force One reference there, "get off my ship." Great movie and it works well. I assume that this fic will end in the next chapter so I look forward to the epilogue.

Wow, Tanis is persistent. But I don't think he is going to survive this one. Poor Requisitions Officer. I mean he was probably just relaxing, then bam! Killed by a stowaway. Good chapter.

Yay, Sheppard and his team won. And just have to say, Joker has got some real guts with that maneuver. He navigated a ship as large as the Normany into a narrow canyon. And survived almost without a scratch. Serious skills there. Great chapter.

Heh, popsicle stand. That's the problem with using slang or your society's expressions. They rely on context to be understood. So very confusing to someone not of the same culture. That Turian must have been real confused. It was a good strategy using Lift on the hostages. Though Hanscom annoyed me. He is spineless and an ass, not a good combination. I just know he is going to cause trouble for Sheppard and his team. Good chapter, though you mislabeled it. It's chapter 11, but on the top of the page it is labeled chapter 12. Now I'm going to read the real chapter 12.

Nice plan with the explosives. As for the scientists, in the immortal words of Star Wars, I've got a bad feeling about this. Something is going to go wrong, but it wouldn't be a good action story if something didn't. Good chapter.

Tanis is like a coachroach. No matter how many times you stomp on him, he keeps coming back. Garrus rocked. He completely shut that Salarian down with fast and efficient Jujutsu. And of course you can't forget Wrex with his love of explosives. The story is really exciting. The Geth have arrived and everything is going to hell. Great chapter.

Well Kaiden still rocks. And that is a very good point about the pistols. I am curious why the game has it so you can only use one pistol at a time. Anyway, bombs are all ready, with 60 minutes on the timer. The situation is getting really explosive, pun intended. Another excellent chapter.

Cool. The tensions are building. The story is reaching its heart pounding climax. Though a negative note, your grammar has actually gone down a little bit. A minor flaw however in an overall excellent chapter.

Wrex, master of subtlety you are not. But you do rock. And you gotta love your use of dibs and your love of powerful things that make other things go boom. The pirates are idiots, no real surprise there. And the team is in such a crappy situation, I have to create a new word for it. They are in a crapsuation. Another excellent chapter.

You gotta love biotics. They really saved the day here. As usual the action is fun and exciting, as well as well written. As for mistakes I did notice some problems with your tenses. However, grammar errors aside, it was an excellent chapter.